Can someone give me feedback on this Compulsory Military Service Essay?

by Ritesh
(Bangalore)

Can anyone please tell me how much will i possibly score in writing with below essay?


Many countries have compulsory military service for men after they leave school. It would be a good idea to adopt this system, for men and possibly women.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?


With increasing job opportunities and career options in various fields people are reluctant to join military. This is becoming a major concern for various countries. There are a few countries where men have to serve military necessarily after completing their education. In my opinion this rule should be there in every country both for men and women. This will not only strengthen armed forces of the country but will also improve health and security of people.

Although countries have started using machines more than men during wars, still the importance of human soldiers cannot be neglected. With the growth of finance, marketing and education sectors, people are getting more job opportunities. most importantly the risk of life is not there in these sectors. This is the main reason of people becoming reluctant to join armed forces. If military service is made mandatory, people will not have any option other than joining military for a few years. This will help in strengthening of military.

Health is another area where people will be benefitted by joining military. Rigorous exercises and activities help in strengthening both mind and body. Increasing fat in people can be dealt with only by physical exercise.

Crime is growing at an alarming rate in every country. More than half of these crimes are against women. Most of these crimes are committed because women are not confident enough to oppose the crime. Military training can help in improving their confidenceto stand against crime and raise their voice.

To conclude, military service after schooling should be made compulsory both for males as swell as females. This improve country's security as well as the health of its citizens.

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