Changing Society Essays

by Mohsin Hassan Khan
(Quetta, Pakistan)

Some people think that only governments can make significant changes in society, while others think that individuals can have a lot of influence.

What is your opinion?

Alterations in the society can be brought by government and sometimes by individuals too, think people. However, it is true that society is made by every single person but controlled by government. Although individuals can make changes but the ideas and will of every person differ; therefore government not only has to spread the awareness among people but it also has to impose new laws, which everyone has to follow or is compelled to follow, in order to make society an excellent place to inhabit.

Some people like to invest their own belongings to make their society better while some are reluctant just because they think the government should fulfill their needs particularly the basic ones. For instance, two persons living in a same street: one throws the garbage in the dustbin which he himself has planted outside his home. Other throws his garbage on the road of the same street and thinks that any government servant will come and clean the street. So, by these two opposite actions the society cannot be cleaned because the hard work of one person will go in vein just because of the action on another person.

Government has the power to make people aware of things which harm and which are beneficial for the society. For example, government should spread the awareness through things like media and home to home surveys. This will reduce the negatives in society and increase the positives.

In addition to the government's range of authority, government can introduce new laws and can bound people to follow them. Like, if one's idea or will of benefiting society does not match another's idea then it does not matter because government wants them to follow what it wants them to follow. By doing this, opposition of one another will vanish.

To conclude, despite individuals' clash in changing society, the government can make them do the same work which would be constructive for the sovereignty. I believe if citizens abide the laws which are promulgated my government then the society will be as clean as a whistle.

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Jan 04, 2016
by: Anonymous

I don't get it.....please make your points clear.

Jun 13, 2016
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this is not a good essay bro, especially the example

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Changing Society Essay

by Arvind Sharma


My name is Arvind Sharma. I am from India and preparing for IELTS without taking any coaching. Recently, I have come across to this web site which I have found quite useful. I have written an essay which needs to be checked for marking criteria.

Here is an essay question and answer:-

Some people think that only the government can make significant changes in society, while others think that individuals can have a lot of influence.

What is your opinion?

In today’s world, making substantial changes in society has always been a major concern for every nation. It is believed that these changes can be made only by the government, whereas others argue that an individual can make a difference and eventually change the society. This essay will address both sides of this argument and finally reach to a conclusion with an opinion.

On the one hand, It is considered that government of every nation can make important changes in society by enforcing the law and conducting the awareness seminars. To put this in another way, people’s safety can only be ensured if the government enforces law and order in society. For instance, according to a social experiment, safety is a crucial matter in a society which is being expected by people from the ruling administration. Moreover, government should take effective steps in order to conduct the awareness seminars which will help people to aware and understand the acute problems of a society. Thus, it is clear that government plays a vital role in making a significant difference between a better and worse society.

On the other hand, Despite government aid, individuals should understand the responsibilities towards the betterment of a society. Firstly, people can change the society by actively participating in the social activities. For example, being social activists, they will understand and resolve the critical issues of the society which cannot be felt without being socialist. Secondly, youngsters should be encouraged to attain a higher education and set an example in a society for others who have been demoralized in their life. Finally, a person should be helpful and kind to others and especially to those who are needy. Therefore, it has been proven that every individual has a potential to change the society by simply encouraging and motivating themselves.

In conclusion, after discussing the both sides of an argument, in my opinion, although it should be the prime responsibility of the government in making important changes in a society, the individuals should also be matured and responsible in order to help society emerging from worse conditions and to make it a better place.

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May 17, 2016
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by: A maybe-lucky 8.0 writer

Hello there.

Although it's a good essay, I truly recommend you to fix these mistakes:

1. At the introduction, you should ALWAYS point out your point of view of the problem at the end of the 1st par. You can "strongly agree", "partly advocate" with the idea. As I said, be straightforward.

2. Generally, you have a major mistake which will deprive you from getting a high score: No specific examples. I can give you some hints: goverment can make changes: compare between US government and Chinese to show the impact of their policies onto the environment, lifestyle, technology ... Your choice. Individual: take the young boy in Hong Kong who is fighting for democracy. ALWAYS: Be specific.

3. There are some minor mistake, like the first idea in 2nd par is confusing (government enforced law to keep the society safe from harm). Well, I think I shouldn't fix your main idea but let you read again and reconsider.

So, "no pain, no gain". Keep up the good work.

May 19, 2016
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by: Anonymous

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Sep 30, 2016
by: Sekhar44#

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