Culture Essay

by May anne ravis
(Philippines)


Some people think that a person can never understand a culture of the country unless they speak the language.

Do you agree with this opinion?


Understanding one's culture is a significant issue nowadays. Making headway with this especially the pressure of modern life, some are convinced that speaking the language is the way to learn the culture. Language is pivotal, but I believed that there are more significant things that a people can bear in mind when adapting the culture.

Language is important for us to live comfortably especially to a non-English country. It is very hard to start your life if you can't even understand what they are talking about. For instance, buying at the store whereas some have their own alphabets also and you cannot understand even just single letter. Another example is if you want to ask some directions and you don't know what they are saying because they are using body language too. However, there are many more ways which I think can help people more to know the culture.

Moreover, there are conservative countries where you need to cover your hair as well as your skin and you are required to wear abaya which is a black long dress along with a black veil-like head garment. In addition, you also need to follow some religious aspects like prayer times which is 4 times daily. All stores are closed during these times. However, there are also things you need to avoid when it comes to socialization. A single lady is not allowed to go put and to have fun with a single man. It is only permitted if you are accompanied by a couple and you are ready to present some proof of relations whenever you came across with some police. Pork is not allowed in this country.

In conclusion, language is not the only way to learn a culture but there are more important things like following rules and regulations when it comes to clothing, socializing, religion and food.

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Aug 25, 2017
Band score essay
by: Rayray

What do you think is the band score on this kind of essay?

Oct 31, 2017

by: Anonymous

As an examinee myself, I think your vocabulary is better than I do. However, I may not be in the position to say this but the coherence is a little bit off. I took the exam recently, and got 6.5. Thus, I am undergoing writing sessions and I realized most of my essays are going off track which maybe the reason I got 6.5. Couple of years ago, I was able to achieve a band 7-8 for writing and my vocabulary & grammar were just average.

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Multiculturalism Essay

by ABHISHEK SINHA
(Gurgaon,Haryana)

In multi-cultural societies, people of different cultural backgrounds live and work together.

Do you think the advantages of multi-cultural societies outweigh the disadvantages?


Globalisation has given the world to come closer and today we can experience several cultures staying and working at a common platform. A multi-cultured group brings a wider area of learning, celebration, and a well living environment. Similarly it creates some resistance in the society because of certain group of people being bigot. I think a place with people carrying so many cultures has a enormous benefit than drawback.

When several cultures come together we all feel happy in learning new languages. We participate in events and festivals. This brings people coming closer to each other and adopting new style of living and working. Some of the orthodox style are replaced by new and pragmatic way. For example, In India we had a brutal ritual of burning lady who lost her husband. This was objected by the British empire first and later got stopped. Similarly the language which is in demanded across the globe, been learnt by Indians. The advantage of it is very evident now.

Having said that, mixed culture also creates a lots of hindrance mainly by the people in the society who are not open to learn and accept. Bigot people are pivotal for such situation as they abhor others culture. They initiates and participates into a negative aspect of racism where people fight and in some instances becomes the reason of riots among different cultured groups. However this is only when we have more people with less knowledge and are illiterate.

In conclusion, despite of some challenges which a mixed cultures can bring to the society can not overweight the benefits. The evolution of our race and the world we see today is the result of different cultures being together exchanging the knowledge and way of living.

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Aug 28, 2016
good essay
by: Lion

good because it had some difficult words i didn't know

Nov 13, 2016
Good
by: Anonymous

Overall essay is moderate and ideas too... but plz provide easy words.
Why I'm telling is some people are beginner so they can't understand quickly.

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