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Culture Essay

by May anne ravis
(Philippines)


Some people think that a person can never understand a culture of the country unless they speak the language.

Do you agree with this opinion?


Understanding one's culture is a significant issue nowadays. Making headway with this especially the pressure of modern life, some are convinced that speaking the language is the way to learn the culture. Language is pivotal, but I believed that there are more significant things that a people can bear in mind when adapting the culture.

Language is important for us to live comfortably especially to a non-English country. It is very hard to start your life if you can't even understand what they are talking about. For instance, buying at the store whereas some have their own alphabets also and you cannot understand even just single letter. Another example is if you want to ask some directions and you don't know what they are saying because they are using body language too. However, there are many more ways which I think can help people more to know the culture.

Moreover, there are conservative countries where you need to cover your hair as well as your skin and you are required to wear abaya which is a black long dress along with a black veil-like head garment. In addition, you also need to follow some religious aspects like prayer times which is 4 times daily. All stores are closed during these times. However, there are also things you need to avoid when it comes to socialization. A single lady is not allowed to go put and to have fun with a single man. It is only permitted if you are accompanied by a couple and you are ready to present some proof of relations whenever you came across with some police. Pork is not allowed in this country.

In conclusion, language is not the only way to learn a culture but there are more important things like following rules and regulations when it comes to clothing, socializing, religion and food.

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Aug 25, 2017
Band score essay
by: Rayray

What do you think is the band score on this kind of essay?

Oct 31, 2017

by: Anonymous

As an examinee myself, I think your vocabulary is better than I do. However, I may not be in the position to say this but the coherence is a little bit off. I took the exam recently, and got 6.5. Thus, I am undergoing writing sessions and I realized most of my essays are going off track which maybe the reason I got 6.5. Couple of years ago, I was able to achieve a band 7-8 for writing and my vocabulary & grammar were just average.

May 07, 2021
Prayer Times
by: Ahmed Mohamed

The prayer times for Muslims are 5 times a day, not 4.

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Multiculturalism Essay

by ABHISHEK SINHA
(Gurgaon,Haryana)

In multi-cultural societies, people of different cultural backgrounds live and work together.

Do you think the advantages of multi-cultural societies outweigh the disadvantages?


Globalisation has given the world to come closer and today we can experience several cultures staying and working at a common platform. A multi-cultured group brings a wider area of learning, celebration, and a well living environment. Similarly it creates some resistance in the society because of certain group of people being bigot. I think a place with people carrying so many cultures has a enormous benefit than drawback.

When several cultures come together we all feel happy in learning new languages. We participate in events and festivals. This brings people coming closer to each other and adopting new style of living and working. Some of the orthodox style are replaced by new and pragmatic way. For example, In India we had a brutal ritual of burning lady who lost her husband. This was objected by the British empire first and later got stopped. Similarly the language which is in demanded across the globe, been learnt by Indians. The advantage of it is very evident now.

Having said that, mixed culture also creates a lots of hindrance mainly by the people in the society who are not open to learn and accept. Bigot people are pivotal for such situation as they abhor others culture. They initiates and participates into a negative aspect of racism where people fight and in some instances becomes the reason of riots among different cultured groups. However this is only when we have more people with less knowledge and are illiterate.

In conclusion, despite of some challenges which a mixed cultures can bring to the society can not overweight the benefits. The evolution of our race and the world we see today is the result of different cultures being together exchanging the knowledge and way of living.

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Aug 28, 2016
good essay
by: Lion

good because it had some difficult words i didn't know

Nov 13, 2016
Good
by: Anonymous

Overall essay is moderate and ideas too... but plz provide easy words.
Why I'm telling is some people are beginner so they can't understand quickly.

Sep 30, 2022
Multiculturalism essay
by: Anonymous

Overall it was an acceptable paper although there are a lot to mention. The word choice, for instance, gave the impression of being deliberate (trying to use the so-called different high level words) which dilates the sense of coherence of the keywords.

There were mistakenly used third person "s" in some lines and the connection among the ideas in one paragraph could have been clearer and stronger. But in general, it was a nice paper and i would mark it as 6.5.

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Working for a Multinational Organisation Essay

by rupali
(new delhi)

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The best way to understand other cultures is to work for a multinational organisation.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?


There has always been a keen desire in people to gain knowledge about culture and tradition than there own. Whilst some people have the opinion that their relentless inquisition about vivid cultures can be satiated by working in a multinational organisation with people from diverse backgrounds, others have a different point of view.

It is certainly understandable that working with people from various cultures opens up the venue for understanding their cultural whereabouts. To begin, interacting in a diversified cultural atmosphere provides the opportunity to know in-detail about them. For instance the festivals they celebrate, cuisines they cook, their folk dance, clothing, lifestyle etc. Additionally, one can learn a lot about their language and dialect.

However, there is another view to it. People believe that workplace is a place to work, not learn. It is about their profession and they are not comfortable getting personal in such an environment. Furthermore, people don't appreciate talking about their backgrounds socially. They, for instance, have reservations to discuss about where they come from in fear of getting bullied later.

To conclude, it is true that working at multinational organisations unblocks the gateway to unfamiliar cultures, however it is not the best way to gather information. In my view, reading books, travelling, making friends on social media are far better ways to get in-sight about different cultures.

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Sep 24, 2020
Mistake
by: Anonymous

I didn't get your clear opinion, which is necessary to get at least 6 band. Even you didn't mention your opinion in introduction. You have to add if you want to achieve a good band score.

Although, liked your ideas.

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Culture and Clothes Essay

by Deekay
(India)

Can your clothes say something about your culture and character?

Can your clothes say something about your culture and character?

Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes.

Do you agree or disagree?


There is a view that clothes selection presumably provide valuable information regards to individual’s personality and cultural belonging. I partially agree with this statement to several opinions, and I will explain why in this essay.

On the one hand, it is true that the choice of a dress made by each individual is seldom influenced by their personality or mindset. There are often limits to how much we can discover just by looking at someone’s attire, especially when it comes to their personality. For example, the richest person in the world that is Elon Musk usually wears ordinary clothes according to their wishes and this can't say anything about them. This is because he prefers to wear comfortable ones rather than dress style, and it does not make him lose his prestige because everyone knew that he was rich and smart.

On the other hand, I am entirely sure that attires might express the character and culture of people as well. The living environment probably influences the choices of an individual’s body appearance. For instance, urban people presumably has more variety of variations of models and brands, attracting them to have a luxurious lifestyle. In addition, it is also might express the aspect of an individual. Take an example, the motivated and cheerful person commonly apply various colours of attire, but people with serious mental stresses tend to wear dark and untidy garbs.

Overall, the selection of models and colours in the dress can be used as a reference in determining the character and culture of a person. This is provided that the clothes can provide comfort when used.

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Cultural Similarities

by buddy
(sydney)

Cultures around the world today are more similar than they used to be.

What are the reasons?

Do you think it is a positive or negative development?


In today’s society, people find that culture in everywhere becomes standardisation. There are several reasons that cause this happen, and there are both advantages and disadvantages in relation to this trend.

Media is thought to be the main reason that affects culture. Nowadays, most Asian countries can easily access to western culture through media platforms. For example, people are more likely to enjoy watching Hollywood movies rather than movies produced from their own countries. Additionally, tourism and migration are another factor that can have impacts on people’s beliefs. Those who have studied or traveled around the world could adapt to different lifestyle from other countries. For instance, people become independent in many ways including living alone and not relying on their families, because they have used to the western lifestyle when they went abroad.

However, it may cause people’s concern that exposure to western culture from media could hinder the use of language of a country. If audiences are constantly watching foreign movies, especially with the language of English, their native language may be abandoned as they speak and read in English predominately. Nevertheless, I believe that it is a positive trend that people could adapt to the other’s culture. For example, Asian food such as sushi is widely accepted in many western countries, and they are not only love the food but also enjoying using chop sticks. Therefore, food becomes a bridge that is connected between western and eastern, allowing people to have fun by sharing the other’s culture.

In conclusion, various reasons can cause culture become more similar, and I believe that the benefit of this development outweigh its drawback.

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Sep 18, 2015
exellent
by: Anonymous

good.essay is really interesting .very good

Dec 19, 2015
more than excellent
by: Shivam

It is a very good essay from my view on culture which provides essential knowledge.

May 17, 2016
Good essay
by: Anonymous

Just 1 question:
Please correct me if I am wrong but I think the word standardisation should be replaced with standardised?

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Technology and Loss of Culture

by Annie
(korea)

It is predictable that traditional cultures of countries will be lost as technology develops. Technology and tradition are incompatible.

Do you agree or disagree?


No one would deny that the advancement of technology have immensely changed the way of people’s lives, including traditional customs. Regarding this, some people assume that traditional culture of each country will disappear due to the enormous technology breakthroughs. I totally agree with this idea that tradition is unable to co-exist with technology.

To start with, the dramatic development of technology in media may play a critical role in fading away local cultures. It seems easy to find materials illustrating the backgrounds of other countries such as movies and dramas, which in turn, making people expose to other cultures. According to research, this persistent exposure to international media has contributed to a social trend which people become curious about new cultures and in turn welcome it, rather than retaining their local unique culture. Therefore, this may result in the disappearance of cultural diversity as technology advances.

Moreover, the improvement of technology enables people to contact with families living apart more frequently than ever, which is one of the cultures of various countries. With the help of technology appliance such as mobiles and web-camera, people these days have more opportunities to keep in touch with other family members without travelling. However, it was not uncommon for people in the past to visit hometown, especially on special occasions. The frequent contacts help people to feel closer regardless of how far they are. To take Korea as example, visiting the hometown, which was given the great importance on the public before technology developed, is not considered as a priority custom any more. Instead, they travel overseas or afford holiday on special occasion, which means people no longer follow the local tradition.

To recapitulate, the technological improvements have indeed brought about losing tradition in various ways. Hence, I agree that traditions are unable to be compatible with technology.

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Apr 21, 2015
no clear relationship or distinction between the two
by: Prince MacDonald

In your piece you didn't specify or give a direct relation between technology and cultural values. For example you could talk about one cultural value and how technology has taken over or otherwise.i think that would been much better.....thank you

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Following Customs Essay

by gülsüm yıldırım
(Turkey,Adana)

When people move to another country, some of them decide to follow the customs of the new country.
 Others prefer to keep their own customs.

Compare these two choices.


Which one do you prefer?


Habits are one of the crucial component of cultural formation in particular area of the global. In nowadays world, many people encounter with different customs in the places they migrate for several purposes. Some individuals prefer to become familiar with the country they’ve relocated to, some of them adopt to protect their traditions. My personal view is that individuals should not follow the customs of the new country to preserve their culture and identity.

Uniqe customs to the development of a sense of self, which has huge importance for the psychology of people. Accordingly, maintaining these traditions is beneficial to mental health, especially one’s the sense of self. Suggest that you have a conservative attitude on some particular subjects, and your new country has radical or socialist customs. If you enforce yourself not to act like you are, you may experience self-conflict which can be hazardous to your psychological health.

Otherwise, this following may come with a societal issue. In the case of all people comply with their new nation’s habits, a vast majority of the culture may encounter with threatening of forgetting. So, the disappearance of nations cause fewer customs, local dishes, and even superstition diversity, all of which aid our understanding of the world. Each person should safeguard their customs in order to keep alive every culture.

In brief, cultural emergence has considerable constituent, like customs. When people relocate, they may be faced with the decision of whether or not to follow their traditions. As a result, maintaining one’s own conventions tend to sustain both one’s the sense of self as well as one’s cultural heritage.

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Aug 22, 2021
It is confusing
by: Anonymous

I could not grasp what message the writer was trying to pass across. Although the grammar was used wrongly, the article arrangement was good.

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