Essay on Working and Retirement

by Anna

Please check my essay task 2 on Working and Retirement and tell me my grade.

Some countries make it illegal to work past the age of 65.

Do you think people should be forced to retire at a certain age?

In my opinion, yes people above 65 years should be not allowed to work. With increase in age there is a decline in health in many respects which retards the ability of a human to work effectively as compared to young adult.

According to human physiology, brain is made up of neurons which is a building unit. Some cells stores memory, certain areas are involved in cognitive functions, others deals with intelligence work, decision making abilities. With advancement in age brain cells starts degeneration process, in which many brain cells die and particular brain function is loss. this process is irreversible. Alzheimer’s disease is an example in which memory and cognitive function is lost. Similarly, loss of cerebellar functions leads to difficulty in balancing, writing reading and smoothness in work.

So a person with such difficulties cannot work effectively. A surgeon who is 65 years old operating heart, dealing with life, where delicacy, perfection and patience is required cannot work as perfect as a surgeon who is near 40 with same qualification and same capabilities irrespective of experience.

Similarly, a senior school bus driver with loss of decision making power although a good driver can put lives of many kids in danger in just few minutes in critical circumstances. According to medical survey, 70% above 65 age and 90% above 75 years have heart diseases who themselves put their life in danger when they face critical situations, leading to hospital load

So in my view, geriatrics above certain age when their medical and visual senses starts compromising, should be forced to retire. Government should start some pension scheme to support those unemployed seniors so that they can live their further life satisfactory. Engaging them in some community work or opening old people centres can decrease their unemployment depression.

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Aug 15, 2015
band 9
by: Anonymous

Cohesion and coherence tip top, this is a good essay which definately fetches highest band no doubt about it.

l would love to practice and have the gist the write such top quality vocabulary which is smooth flowing.

Aug 16, 2015
Very good
by: Shobha

U know u have good viwes (ideas) for writing

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