Family Communication Essay

by Simpi
(Gurgaon)

Nowadays we communicate less with our family members.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?


It is often argued that millennial generation is largely witnessing the shrinking communication among family members. This essay completely agrees with the statement and discusses how changing life style and enhancing indulgence into the virtual world are impacting the personal lives of young generation.

Firstly, the changing lifestyle owing to huge educational burden, intense competition, and 24/7 work commitments especially in developing countries has put a huge pressure on young generation leaving a little room for them to spend time with family members and enjoy on family occasions. One clear example is young generation specifically in developing countries majorly involve in projects at workplace that include co-ordination among people from different countries which often leads to largely working late nights owing to different time zones. The prevailing late night working culture creates a major time mismatch with other members in the family.

Secondly, the blurring line between real and virtual life such as easy access to social media, internet browsing, various applications and games on mobile itself engage youth and capture major chunk of the day. As per a survey conducted by American Youth Association, the millennial prefer to spend 80% of their idle time on internet and a meager 5% of their time with family.

To conclude, the changing life style and evolution of virtualization have completely disrupted the personal life of young generation. This has left little time for personal communication that nurture the relationships, hence witnessed the rising number of relationships going sour in modern society.

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Please can you give me feedback on my essay about family communication. Thanks.

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Jan 15, 2017
Family communication Essay
by: Anonymous

I totally agree with you on both points in focus especially on indulgence into the virtual world.

Jan 15, 2017
Family communication
by: Anonymous

Simple and straight to the point

Feb 09, 2017
Feedback
by: Anonymous

I think your points are really great and you clearly organised it well, making your essay easy to follow. I think you just have some awkward phrases here and there but then again I didn't do too well in my writing part so don't trust me on this one.

I got the exact same question in my test! And I unfortunately didn't get the mark that I wanted.

I was curious, what mark did you receive?

Mar 14, 2017
Structure
by: Anonymous

introduction - Well paraphrased
Thesis - Clear
Outline - Clear
Topic sentence I - Well Supported
Topic sentence II - Well Supported
Conclusion - Main points summarized

comment-Good essay band 7.5

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