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Housing Essays

by Tam Nguyen


Many cities are currently facing a serious housing shortage.

What are some of the reasons for this shortage and what solutions can you suggest?



It is undoubtedly true that in many cities, the supply of houses is unable to meet the demand for shelters. Although this is caused by several reasons, there are still some feasible solutions for this issue.

There are two main reasons why housing crisis occurs. One reason is because of the scarcity of resources. While the population increases constantly, the amount of land does not increase. Therefore, we do not have sufficient land to fulfill people’s demand for accommodations. Another cause of housing shortage is that, as the quality of healthcare in today’s life has improved dramatically, life expectancy has also increased greatly compared to the past. This leads to a significant rise in the world’s population over time, which will place a burden on housing supply.

However, we still have some feasible measures to tackle this housing problem. Firstly, building more apartments instead of houses may help mitigate the problem of resource scarcity. Since an apartment can accommodate a tremendously higher number of people than a house can, governments should encourage vertical city development instead of horizontal one. Secondly, it is highly recommended that governments restrict the increase in population, which will help decrease the excessive demand for houses. This can be done by limiting the number of children born in families. In China, for example, because the population is huge, Chinese government enforces the rule that each Chinese family must not bear more than two children.

In conclusion, housing shortage is increasingly becoming a severe problem for many cities, and this arises because of various reasons. However, we can still cope with this problem if suitable policies are implemented.

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Rules for Building Houses

by Tony
(Vietnam)

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Some people think that new houses should be built in the same style as the older houses in the local area. Others disagree and say local authorities should allow people to build houses in the style of their own choice.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.


At the outset of cutting-edge sky scraper millennium, the way to construct the building is polarized whether it should be run with the conventional design or pursue the creative one. From my own perspective, millennials should have their own ideal freedom to design their house.

On the one hand, it is not underlying to dispute against the traditional design belonging to local areas. Due to the fact that these unique classic models are solely suitable for geographic traits in specific lands. Cottages, for instance, would be much more efficiently usable for mountainous regions, which are with unflatted surface, than these types of modernized human being. On top of that, these conventional architectures have been occupying both spiritual and cultural custom for some villages and countries, which is accreditted as special national identification, such as igloo in the South polar.

On the other hand, albeit value of outdated model, civilized man have been deploying any sector of our lives to adapt to the innovation of digital world, especially in architectural industry. The more creativity people utilize, the more harsh problems about local habitats are tackled. It seems logical tat ground breaking technology would support the house's owner to obtain thier dreaming house in any kind of geographic environment, even under the mysterious ocean. Additionally, only changing the constructional materials instead of holistic structure and appearance of their house, the national identificial characteristics and custom are still remained wel-known in all over the world.

As aforementioned explanations, citizens should spring theirselves and deploy thier mind to create their beloved settling place.

Comments for Rules for Building Houses

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Nov 14, 2018
Building Houses Essay
by: IELTS buddy

Sorry but I can't provide detailed feedback. The main thing I noticed
though is that it seems you are making it too complicated. It's
difficult to work out what the key ideas are in there that are
answering the question. In places I'm just not sure what you are saying.

I'd take a look at my site or others that explain how to structure an
essay and present your ideas clearly. You have some good vocabulary and grammar but it's not going to help you if your essay is not coherent.

Also be careful with grammar - you have a fragment: "Due to the fact that these unique classic models are solely suitable for geographic traits in specific lands". It's important you know how to write complex sentences correctly.

Nov 18, 2018
Rules for building houses
by: Anonymous

Sorry but I cant make out what you are trying to say in your essay.

Dec 02, 2018
Comment
by: Elshan

The second paragraph:

Tat = that
Tier = their

I like your use of words: groundbreaking technology and etc.

I don't like the paragraph sentence of the body baragraph #2.

In my view, you are probably trying to sound too fancy and overuse nice vocabulary. Thus, it is really hard to get your ideas.

I assume that your examiner won't give you a high score for this essay. Don't be discouraged though.

Dec 06, 2018
Reads like electronic translation from another language
by: Joko

I suppose you might ask someone who knows Vietnamese learners if they can make sense of it, but it reads like something written in an L1, put through google translate and then appended with cohesive devices.

The paragraphs seem to have topic sentences and, supporting sentences with explanations and examples. It's hard to tell. The paragraphs look like they each are focused one side of the discussion. I think.

The conclusion, albeit short, at least serves its role without bringing up new points!

He has discussed both sides and expressed his own opinions in that millennials should have their ideal freedom.

Why only millennials? That could have better supported.

Jan 16, 2019
A no no
by: Anonymous

There is absolutely no way this essay can score above 5. The writer in an attempt to buttress his point, played to the gallery extensively.

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Living in a House or Apartment

by Sze100

Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel there are more advantages to living in an apartment.

Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?


Many people hold the opinion that living in a house is the best. Others, however, disagree and claim that living in an apartment is even better. Hereunder I will look more thoroughly into this matter.

It is undoubtedly true that living in a flat is quite convenient due to many opportunities which it is able to provide. Everything seems to be close, especially if your block of flats is in a good location, and doing your shopping, driving your children to school or having some entertainments like nightlife, for instance, is within the reach of your hand. Moreover, you do not have to worry about repairing your roof or having your apartment insulated, as it is frequently provided by a housing association of some sort. Generally, from my personal point of view, living in a flat is perfect for people who love living in a city and enjoy everything which is connected with that.

On the other hand, having your own house has also some great advantages. Despite the fact that, in my country, living in a detached house or a mansion is often connected with a social status, it brings a lot of different possibilities which are impossible while you live somewhere else. To illustrate this, just imagine yourself sitting in your own garden, with a book and a cup of tea, listening to birds. In my opinion such a scene brings all other disadvantages of living in a house, practically, to zero.

To conclude, I would say that living in a house is for completely different group of people than living in an apartment. I have to admit that I belong to the first one thus I recommend living in a detached house to everybody.

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Nov 25, 2015
Band
by: Author

Hi all,

What band would I get, in your opinion, for this essay on a real exam?

Dec 04, 2015
5.5bands for this essay
by: Sahota

You try best but this type of essay got only 5 or 5.5 band so keep trying more all the best and ember practice makes man perfect

Dec 04, 2015
6band
by: Harveer

You try best but I Agree with Sahota

Dec 03, 2016
band
by: Anonymous

6 band. It is an acceptable essay.

Jun 22, 2017
tera jija
by: tera jija

5 bands I give u.

Beause you write "you" in essay so that's why I give u 5 bands.

It's bad effects on examiner.

Oct 06, 2017
Band 8
by: Jai

Hi,

This essay should have band 8. You have paraphrased your idea. Spoken on both aspects of the given task. You have written a good paragraph, limiting one idea per paragraph. Ideas are arranged cohesively. You have used good range of complex sentence structure.

Jun 04, 2018
Having guts to ask your feedback
by: Anonymous

Please, request to the commentors who gave you 5 or 5.5 band, to come forward, at least write an essay and ask feedback on it.

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IELTS Buying or Renting a Home Essay

by Rahman Rahimli (rehimlirehman90@gmail.com)

IELTS Buying or Renting a Home Essay

IELTS Buying or Renting a Home Essay

In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them.

What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home?


Purchasing a house is getting more expensive as it is a part of human needs. While some people prefer to rent their homes rather than owning them, there are some drawbacks to consider. This essay will discuss some advantages and disadvantages of renting a house.

One of the best benefits of just renting a property would be, in my view, job requirements in which you occasionally need to move to a whole another city to keep working at a certain position. When it comes to looking for a place to live, renting a house for a reasonable price should definitely be considered as your company may change your department again. Another reason for not buying a house is the high prices which a huge number of individuals are not able to afford. Unless you worked and saved half of your salary for about 15 years, it is nearly impossible to buy a home.

However, homeowners are not always predictable. When someone rents a house it will be inevitable to be kicked out of the house, because your homeowner decided to sell the house instead of renting it. Moreover, they might not always be comfortable, when you have some relatives or friends over. For instance, I recently rented a home, and the homeowner warned me that he would not allow me to invite my girlfriend to the house, as he thought it was inappropriate.

To sum up, In my opinion, considering advantages outcome disadvantages in terms of renting a home, when left with a choice, it is a better option to not squander one's money on buying a house.

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Building Homes in the Countryside Essay

by Yami
(Saudi Arabia)

In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside.

Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and so new homes should not be built there.

What is your opinion about this?


these days, with the great expansion of cities and population, many people are considering building houses in places outside cities, like the rural areas. While many people are saying it is a bad idea, I believe it is a great thing for people to do so with many merits that I will elaborate more about.

first of all, constructing new houses in the countryside has a crucial benefit in regard to the financial aspects. with this said, the expansion of the population will force many individuals with low economic status to go and live in the rural areas due to the low prices of owning a home there. to give an example for this, if owning a single room in city costs around fifty thousand dollars, with the same price tag you can buy a four bedroom apartment. thus, it is a better option for those who wants to save money.

going to my second point, I would like to say that it is better for individuals to build houses there to enjoy the beautiful wonders of mother nature. nowadays, many individuals tend to choose to go out and have a great time while they are enjoying the natural beauty of the countryside. Occasionally, people construct houses there just to live there temporarily during holidays and leisure time.

finally, despite many people claiming that constructing new homes may cause damage the countryside environment, with strict laws and spreading awareness , one can easily manage to keep the environment clean.

in conclusion, many people at present focus solely on the negative aspects of building a home in the countryside while ignoring many great benefits someone might harvest from such investment like the financial and enjoying a great view there.

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Owning or Renting a Home Essay

by Khang Cao
(Vietnam)

In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people.

Why might this be the case?

Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?


Everyone needs food to eat, water to drink and a shelter to settle in. In the past, owning a home was a symbol of wealth, success and stability. However, as the modern civilisation advancing, the mindset has changed a lot. Nowadays, there are some people thinking that having a house is no longer important as it was in the past. Generally speaking, renting a house is a rising trend these days, but why there are still people assuming that renting a house is nothing compared to having one?

In many Asian countries, there has always been an invisible pressure put on men since they were born. Those can be academic achievements, success in career via various ways such as being in the top of a school, having a high-paying job or obviously, owning a private accommodation. Because of the conservative ideology, Asians usually consider a house is an indicator of prosperity and high-tier social status, not only for themselves but also for their families and children. Moreover, people usually want to claim ownership, and this is not new throughout human history. Take colonies, for example, people always desire something that they can have absolute control over it. While a rent house may not satisfy your demand because you have minimal rights to do anything you want with it.

As mentioned above, renting a house has some certain disadvantages. Firstly, it is definitely not a long-term investment even though you can avoid mortgage deposit and other taxes, but you will be under the supervision of the landlord all the time. For example, you cannot renovate or redecorate your home at all without the landlord’s permission. Next, if you choose this type of housing, you may take risk of being moved multiple times due to limited vacancies or property sale from the landlord. Last but not least, since the proprietor is in charge, he or she might suddenly raise the rent, and that is a really big issue when you are in the condition of insufficient finance.

Bottom line, possessing a house is better than renting one. Although you may have to be responsible for repairs, remodelling or pay land-related additional fees, it is yours and always be. No matter what happens to you, remember there is always a home awaiting you to come back.

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