IELTS Essay - Ways to Reduce Crime

by das729

I know this is way over the word count. But I keep getting 6 on my writing. Can someone please tell me if this is okay for an essay?

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Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.


A lot of people believe we need to reduce crime. Some people believe we can do that by giving inmates longer time in prison, while others believe there are other ways we can accomplish reducing crime. This essay will explain both sides and give an opinion.

The first view states that people think we should give longer prison sentences. People believe if someone has committed crime they should stay in prison longer. We need to increase penalty rates by law. They did something wrong so the prisoners should have to pay for what they have done and therefore they will be staying out of trouble in prison. In prison they have programs that help inmates to make better decisions in life. For example, they have counsellor and can help people look at getting a trade job when they are released from prison.

The second view point says some people think there are other ways to reduce crime in the community other than longer prison sentences. One thing we could do is having groups put in the community. For example, making it mandatory that people who have committed a crime go to a counsellor. Another thing we could do is helping them get jobs and therefore they do not feel they need to commit a crime to get by in life. For example, people will steal because they may not be able to afford money for groceries.

In my opinion I believe there are other ways for people to receive the help they need so they do not commit crimes other than jail. No matter what people do not want to go to prison but they still end up there. We need to look at other ways for keeping them out. It may be the only thing they know and some prisoners spend half there life there. Keeping them in prison does not teach them anything, it just keeps them there longer but eventually they will get out and do the same thing again cause that is all they know.

In conclusion there are many different ways we can keep crime low. Some people believe longer prison sentences but I believe there is another alternative than that.

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Sep 13, 2017
joylcd - IELTS Essay - Ways to Reduce Crime
by: Anonymous

Certain people believe that a longer life imprisonment is the best possible way to eliminate the increasing criminality rate in our society, however, some believe that there are other ways to reduce the crime rate. In my opinion, it is necessary that the government will focus more about this issue. This essay will discuss the views and opinions about this problem.

Firstly,there are certain ways that usually applied to the inmates as part of the program that the Department of Justice and police department should implement. Like for instance, providing projects which enables them to be productive even inside the prison such as making lanterns during Christmas season, making a handicraft projects and more. In addition to this, this is one of the best ways in supporting their families in financial aspect.

Secondly, lengthen the time of sentences for the prisoner is also an alternative way of punishment, but it depends on how heavy or not the crime that has been committed by the convictee. Aside from that, it is one of the best solutions in prohibiting the person to get involve in the crime, the more higher the punishment is, the more it is for the criminals not to get involved in certain evil act which might cause trouble and danger to the innocent people.

To sum up,there are different ways that the government sector should implement for the safety and security of the citizen in the specific place. Thus, it is necessary to abide the policies and the rules to live in a peaceful and zero crime rate society.

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