IELTS Graph - Computer ownership

by Liza
(Moscow)

Computer ownership as a percentage of the population

Computer ownership as a percentage of the population

Hello everyone,

here's an IELTS Academic Writing 1 assignment I have written today. I would really appreciate if anyone could comment on this and especially tell me whether it could be given a good mark (6.5 or higher)? Thank you in advance!

(test from the site of British Council)


The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the
population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and
2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make
comparisons where relevant.


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The 2 bar graphs illustrate the data about how many people owned a computer in years 2002-2010, as well as illustrating the correlation between owning a computer and having a certain level of education.

According to the data, there had been a steady rise in the amount of computer owners over the period of eight years. It went up from just 55% (that is, roughly a half) of the total population to 75% in 2010, that is, rose by 20%.

As for the educational level of computer owners, here the changes seem to be more dramatic. 5 different levels had been taken into account, from those with no high school diploma to those having a postgraduate qualifications. While in the year 2002 only 15% of the first had a computer, the percentage had tripled by the year 2008, reaching 45%. Those with a postgraduate degree in both 2002 and 2008 accounted for the highest percent of computer ownership, but the difference between the two years is less impressive, as it went from 75% to 95%, thus covering almost all people with such a degree. Computers also gained popularity among the rest of the population, namely those who had completed high school, college and those with a bachelors degree. With each of those levels computer ownership increases in both 2002 and 2010.

To sum up up, there are several trends to be mentioned. Along with a steady growth of computer ownership among the population, there is a link between owning a computer and having a particular educational level as the higher the latter is among those people whose data had been collected, the more probable it is that they have a computer.

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