IELTS Line Graph - Proportion of Elderly

by Sarvar

The graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

Hello everyone, please check out my essay. Friends check the coherence and cohesion, structure of the essay. Thanks a lot.

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The bar chart shows some information on the population aged 65 and over in the UK. The data are available for 1985 and there is a projection for 2035.

As an overall trend, the proportion of people aged 65 and over will be by far higher in 2035 than in 1985. In 1985 the aging population has the largest percent of just over 15% in Wales. While the share of Northern Ireland is less by about fifth and is around 12% which is the smallest for the same year. By the year 2035, Wales will have the largest share in the aging population again, and it will exceed its own figure for the year 1985 by about two-thirds coming up to over 25%.

It is interesting to note that England and Northern Ireland will have the same shares of about 23% in 2035 whereas back in 1985 their portions significantly are not the same.

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Oct 02, 2016
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by: Anonymous

Are you joking? Wales? Northern Ireland?

Oct 05, 2016
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by: Anonymous

A line graph depicting the percentage of elderly populace within 65 years and above in three countries(The USA, Sweden , Japan) between 1940 to 2040.Units are measured in percentage.

Overall,Japan had the highest percentage of elderly populace within 65 years and above at the end even though it started as the lowest at the beginning of the period.The USA had the highest percentage of elderly at the beginning but the lowest at the end of the period.Sweden had the second highest at the beginning and still ended in the same position at the end.
Japan started with a decrease in the percentage of the elderly populace while both The USA and Sweden started with increases.

Japan had the highest percentage of 24% elderly populace in 2040 while it had approximately 3% in 1960 which was the lowest.During the period between 1940 to 1960,Japan had a decrease in elderly population to 3% while The USA and Sweden had steady increases up to(10% and 8% respectively).

Nov 16, 2016
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OFF TOPIC!
by: Anonymous

Hi.

I would advise you not to go off the topic, or else you will never get an overall band of 6 in writing task 1.

Please stick to the topic and try to cluster the ideas and show differences and similarities where needed. In your intro, you have to mention all the country names. In your overall statement, just say whose the highest and whose the lowest, you can right a maximum of 6 sentences in your overall statement.

Now with regards to your third paragraph, state the differences and similarities and try to cluster the points. I hope that you find the above beneficial.

Thanks.

Nov 25, 2016
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by: Sun kimhong

Are you kidding me? It sounds too complicated too me. I think the writing does not make any sense with the graph.

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