IELTS Task 1 Writing: Line Graph
Unemployment Rates in Japan and USA

by simran
(india)

THE GRAPH SHOWS THE UNEMPLOYMENT RATES IN THE US AND JAPAN BETWEEN MARCH 1993 AND MARCH 1999.

THE GRAPH SHOWS THE UNEMPLOYMENT RATES IN THE US AND JAPAN BETWEEN MARCH 1993 AND MARCH 1999.

The line compares changes in the percentage of people who were unemployed in the USA and Japan over a period of 6 years from 1993 to 1999

Overall, the chart indicates that the proportion of unemployment rates in the USA declined gradually over the period shown. The figures for Japan increased, however.

There were 7% of Americans who were unemployed in march 1993, according to the information available from the chart shown. . The figure for Japan, on the other hand, was noticeably lower, at just 2.5%

Between March 1993 and March 1997, there was changes in the percentage of unemployment rate in the USA , as the figure fell markedly to 5% until about March 1997. Despite some minor fluctuation, the figure remained relatively stable for the next years, ending the final period to about 5%. By contrast during the same period of time , the percentage of unemployment rate in the japan increased gradually for the subsequent years rising to about 4.5% in March 1996, before rising to well above 5% in March 1998. Since then, there was a period of stability in the percentage of unemployment part from a slight fluctuation.

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The line graph (you can't just say 'the line') compares changes in the percentage of people who were unemployed in the USA and Japan over a period of 6 years from 1993 to 1999.

Overall, the chart indicates that the proportion of unemployment rates in the USA declined gradually over the period shown. The figures for Japan increased, however.

There were 7% of Americans who were unemployed in March 1993, according to the information available from the chart shown. The figure for Japan, on the other hand, was noticeably lower, at just 2.5%



Between March 1993 and March 1997, there were changes in the percentage of unemployment rate in the USA, as the figure fell markedly to 5% until about March 1997. Despite some minor fluctuation, the figure remained relatively stable for the next few years, ending the final period at about 5%. By contrast, during the same period of time, the percentage of unemployment rate unemployed in the japan increased gradually for the subsequent years (using 'subsequent' here is confusing as the last year you mentioned was 1997, not 1993) rising to about 4.5% in March 1996, before rising to well above 5% in March 1998. Since then, apart from a slight fluctuation, there was a period of stability in the percentage of unemployment part from a slight fluctuation

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Its a good answer overall, but just a few points:

Subject

Be careful with your subject when you describe graphs.

You can talk about the 'percentage of unemployment' or 'unemployment rates' but you can't use both like you do i.e.' the percentage of unemployment rate' (this is wrong).

Percentages and rates are both measurements.

Comparing Data

You do make comparisons of data in your graph which is good, but an important point that you should mention is that they are both equal at the end and follow the same pattern.

This is a key point so you should make specific reference to it.

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Unemployment Rates in Japan and USA

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Jun 07, 2014
(Vietnam)
by: TIEP NGUYEN VAN

The line graph illustrates the rates of unemployment in the US and Japan in the period from Mar 1993 to Mar 1999. In general, there were fluctuation in the rates of unemployment in the US and Japan over the years.

To specify, from Mar 1993 to Mar 1999, the rates of unemployment in the US demonstrated downward fluctuation, falling from a high of 7.0 percent to about 5.1 percent.

By contract, after a slight fluatution upward from a low of 2.5 percent to nearly 4.1 percent for the first three years, the rates unemployment in the Japan rised to highest point of 5.2 percent in Mar 1998, before a insignificant decline to approximately 4.9 percent in Mar 1999.
Only in Mar 1998 did the unemployment in the US and Japan met each other.

Jul 03, 2014
model essay
by: jim lee

The line graph shows the number of The USA and Japanese people unemployed between Mar 1993 and Mar 1999. Overall, the uneployment rate in the USA shows a downward trend while that of Japan increases gradually . Also, the unemployment rates in both countries are the same between 1998 and 1999.

In 1993, 7 % of people in the USA were unemployed while the figure for Japan was noticeably lower, at just 2.5%. From 1994 to 1998 , the number of Japanese people who were unemployed increased dramatically from just under 3.5 % to around 4.5 % , a rise of about 1% of its population in just 5 years. On the other hand , the USA unemployment rate decreased by 2.5% over the same period shown. By 1999, there was a period of stability in the percentage of unemployment in both countries , standing at just over 5% (150 words)


Jul 25, 2014
Writing
by: Hoang Giang

The line chart compares the percentage of people who were unemployed in the USA and Japan from 1993 to 1999. It is clear from the chart that the unemployment rates decreased gradually in the US, on the other hand,the figure for Japan increased.

In two years, from March 1993 to March 1995, the percentage of unemployment in the USA declined steadily from 7.0 percent to 5.5 percent. It fluctuated slightly in next 2 years then remain static at about 5.0 percent in the last period.
On the other hand, the figure in Japan rose significantly, from 2.5 percent to nearly 5.0 percent in the period between 1993 and 1998. After this period, the unemployment rate remained stably at 5.0 percent from March 1998 to March 1999.

In conclusion, although the percentages of unemployment in the USA and in Japan fluctuated sharply from 1993 to 1998 , both of them remained stably at 5 percent from March 1998 to March 1999.

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