IELTS Task 1 Writing: Line Graph
Unemployment Rates in Japan and USA

by simran
(india)

THE GRAPH SHOWS THE UNEMPLOYMENT RATES IN THE US AND JAPAN BETWEEN MARCH 1993 AND MARCH 1999.

THE GRAPH SHOWS THE UNEMPLOYMENT RATES IN THE US AND JAPAN BETWEEN MARCH 1993 AND MARCH 1999.

The line compares changes in the percentage of people who were unemployed in the USA and Japan over a period of 6 years from 1993 to 1999


Overall, the chart indicates that the proportion of unemployment rates in the USA declined gradually over the period shown. The figures for Japan increased, however.

There were 7% of Americans who were unemployed in march 1993, according to the information available from the chart shown. . The figure for Japan, on the other hand, was noticeably lower, at just 2.5%

Between March 1993 and March 1997, there was changes in the percentage of unemployment rate in the USA , as the figure fell markedly to 5% until about March 1997. Despite some minor fluctuation, the figure remained relatively stable for the next years, ending the final period to about 5%. By contrast during the same period of time , the percentage of unemployment rate in the japan increased gradually for the subsequent years rising to about 4.5% in March 1996, before rising to well above 5% in March 1998. Since then, there was a period of stability in the percentage of unemployment part from a slight fluctuation.

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The line graph (you can't just say 'the line') compares changes in the percentage of people who were unemployed in the USA and Japan over a period of 6 years from 1993 to 1999.

Overall, the chart indicates that the proportion of unemployment rates in the USA declined gradually over the period shown. The figures for Japan increased, however.

There were 7% of Americans who were unemployed in March 1993, according to the information available from the chart shown. The figure for Japan, on the other hand, was noticeably lower, at just 2.5%

Between March 1993 and March 1997, there were changes in the percentage of unemployment rate in the USA, as the figure fell markedly to 5% until about March 1997. Despite some minor fluctuation, the figure remained relatively stable for the next few years, ending the final period at about 5%. By contrast, during the same period of time, the percentage of unemployment rate unemployed in the japan increased gradually for the subsequent years (using 'subsequent' here is confusing as the last year you mentioned was 1997, not 1993) rising to about 4.5% in March 1996, before rising to well above 5% in March 1998. Since then, apart from a slight fluctuation, there was a period of stability in the percentage of unemployment part from a slight fluctuation

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Its a good answer overall, but just a few points:

Subject

Be careful with your subject when you describe graphs.

You can talk about the 'percentage of unemployment' or 'unemployment rates' but you can't use both like you do i.e.' the percentage of unemployment rate' (this is wrong).

Percentages and rates are both measurements.

Comparing Data

You do make comparisons of data in your graph which is good, but an important point that you should mention is that they are both equal at the end and follow the same pattern.

This is a key point so you should make specific reference to it.

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Jun 07, 2014
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(Vietnam)
by: TIEP NGUYEN VAN

The line graph illustrates the rates of unemployment in the US and Japan in the period from Mar 1993 to Mar 1999. In general, there were fluctuation in the rates of unemployment in the US and Japan over the years.

To specify, from Mar 1993 to Mar 1999, the rates of unemployment in the US demonstrated downward fluctuation, falling from a high of 7.0 percent to about 5.1 percent.

By contract, after a slight fluatution upward from a low of 2.5 percent to nearly 4.1 percent for the first three years, the rates unemployment in the Japan rised to highest point of 5.2 percent in Mar 1998, before a insignificant decline to approximately 4.9 percent in Mar 1999.
Only in Mar 1998 did the unemployment in the US and Japan met each other.

Jul 03, 2014
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model essay
by: jim lee

The line graph shows the number of The USA and Japanese people unemployed between Mar 1993 and Mar 1999. Overall, the uneployment rate in the USA shows a downward trend while that of Japan increases gradually . Also, the unemployment rates in both countries are the same between 1998 and 1999.

In 1993, 7 % of people in the USA were unemployed while the figure for Japan was noticeably lower, at just 2.5%. From 1994 to 1998 , the number of Japanese people who were unemployed increased dramatically from just under 3.5 % to around 4.5 % , a rise of about 1% of its population in just 5 years. On the other hand , the USA unemployment rate decreased by 2.5% over the same period shown. By 1999, there was a period of stability in the percentage of unemployment in both countries , standing at just over 5% (150 words)


Jul 25, 2014
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Writing
by: Hoang Giang

The line chart compares the percentage of people who were unemployed in the USA and Japan from 1993 to 1999. It is clear from the chart that the unemployment rates decreased gradually in the US, on the other hand,the figure for Japan increased.

In two years, from March 1993 to March 1995, the percentage of unemployment in the USA declined steadily from 7.0 percent to 5.5 percent. It fluctuated slightly in next 2 years then remain static at about 5.0 percent in the last period.
On the other hand, the figure in Japan rose significantly, from 2.5 percent to nearly 5.0 percent in the period between 1993 and 1998. After this period, the unemployment rate remained stably at 5.0 percent from March 1998 to March 1999.

In conclusion, although the percentages of unemployment in the USA and in Japan fluctuated sharply from 1993 to 1998 , both of them remained stably at 5 percent from March 1998 to March 1999.

Oct 23, 2014
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Please check
by: Anonymous

The line graph compares the proportion of unemployed people living in US and Japan from March 1993 to 1999, a period of 6 years. It is measured in percentages.

There has been a significant difference with regard to the percentage of work force in US and Japan over the period. Though many people in US were unemployed at the beginning of the year, the proportion significantly decreased by the end of the period, whereas unemployment rates in Japan dramatically increased at this same time.

In March 1993, the number of unemployed people in Japan were very low at only 2.5% compared with those of US at 7.0%, which was the highest recorded unemployment case. Though challenged by a poor start, US began to catch its pace in the succeeding years. In March 1994, its unemployment rate declined by 10%, which was contrary to the rise of unemployed people in Japan at 12%. Over the next two years, Japan continued to struggle because of its rising number of unemployed workers, while a slight fluctuation was only observed in US. Nonetheless, US efforts to continually lessen its unemployed workers remained effective. Unemployed US workers were only 5.3% in 1996. In contrast, Japan's unemployment rate continually rose to almost 4.5%. In March 1998, US and Japan were almost equal in value at 5.3%. They leveled at 5% in March 1999.

Dec 19, 2014
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Task 1: Line Graph - Unemployment in US and Japan
by: Anonymous

the following line graph elucidates unemployment rate of USA workforce than to Japan in course of 7 years.

JApan had a workforce percentage just under 2.5 on 93 which was on a steady rise since then.With some ups & downs from 95 to 97 the workforce percentage reached its peak just after a few months of march 98.

But on the sharp contrary US workforce experienced a heavy downfall.It was on its top on 93 at 7% & went down since.with this continious decline since march 93 to 97 the workforce reached its nadir at below 5% before march 98.

it is quite clear that the workforce percentage graph is quite the opposite between USA & japan.but their workforce percentage intersected twice in between 98 to 99 at over 5% and at 5% respectively.

Jan 14, 2015
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My answer.
by: Anonymous

The given graph depicts the unemployment rate in the US and Japan over a period of 6 years.

Initially in 1993, the unemployment rate in US (over 6.5%) was much higher than in Japan (3%). Over the period of 2 years, the unemployment rate steadily increased in Japan while in US the unemployment rate was in steady decay. In Japan unemployment rate increased linearly from 1995 to 1996, while in US some ups and downs occurred in the unemployment rate but maintained its previous value. Until March 99, both countries’ unemployment rate gained approximately same value by undergoing some ups and downs.

It is noted that Japan’s unemployment rate increased from three percent to 5 percent while US’s decreased from 7% to 5 when both gained same value.

Sep 15, 2015
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Comment please
by: Anonymous

The graph illustrates the unemployment rates between US and Japan over a period from March 1993 to March 1999. Overall, both countries came to a fluctuation in their unemployment rates and having an average of 5 percent of work force for the last two years in that period.

At the beginning period in March 1993, Japan started with 2.5 percent of work force which is lower compared with US having 7.5 percent of work force. Subsequently, the percentage of work force in Japan increases every year and its peak was at 1998 with 5.25 percent of work force.

In contrast with US, which started with a high percentage of work force at 7.5 percentage in March 1993. Its percentage of work force was plummeting each year until the mid of 1997 and 1998. Afterwards the remaining years of that period, the percentage of work force in US fluctuated between 5.25 and 4.75 percentage.

Mar 03, 2016
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my comment
by: sanaul Hoque

It was really impressive description. i appreciate

May 04, 2016
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Please rate this
by: Anonymous

The line graph compares unemployment rates in USA and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999.

In the beginning of the period, USA had the highest and Japan the lowest unemployment rates. However, these levelled off at the same rate towards the end of this time period of 6 years.

Although the unemployment rates of USA started at 7% in 1993, which was 4.5% higher than Japan, at 2.5%, they both levelled off at 5% in the middle of 1998. This was a consequence of opposite trends, where the employment rates decreased in USA, whilst a proportionally similar increase was seen in Japan.

May 11, 2016
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11th March 2016
by: Sujit

The line graph illustrate the changes in employment rates of US and Japan from 1993 to 1999 in the month of March.

Over the span of given period, unemployment rate in Japan experienced a significant rise whereas people were finding it easy to get jobs in US in a gradual succession.

Japan had unemployment rate of only 2.5% in the beginning of March 1990 which grew steadily over the years hitting its highest in March 1998 doubling its initial figures.

However, US fell down on the unemployment scale every year. 7% unemployed people were recorded in the initial year of study. It went down fluctuating in between. Japan overtook US on this scale by March 1998 just before US marked its lowest unemployment percentage (just below 5%) of last six years.

Clearly, there are more chances of people getting jobs in US as opposed to Japan where unemployment rate is creeping up the chart every year.

May 20, 2016
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Pls check this.
by: ACR

The line graph depicts the number of people who do not have a work between March 1993 and March 1999. The study was done in two countries namely US and Japan.

In United States, the unemployed people in the beginning of the study was at 7% and started to decrease which fell on 5.5% after 2 years, even though there were times that unemployment rate had increments which did not go beyond its previous record. Another similar dip was noted in 1996 ans the rate was gradually drop though it depicted variations, and ended at 5%.

Meanwhile, Japan unemployment rate began at 2.5% and it followed by a sharp inclination in 1993. Over the years a steady increased noted until 1996 before a steep decrease in mid 1996 then resurgence in rating follows. In 1998 it had a same unemployment rate as much of that in US at over 5% and ended with a dip in the last year of the study at 5% which was again same as much as for US.

Overall, even though US had the most significant rate of unemployed group of people it finished with a similar percentage as in Japan. The two countries presented an opposite trend where US illustrated deflation rate whereas Japan showed inflation.

May 28, 2016
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essay
by: Anonymous

nice one

Jun 22, 2016
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by: Anonymous

The line chart compares the percentage of people who were unemployed in the USA and Japan from 1993 to 1999. It is clear from the chart that the unemployment rates decreased gradually in the US, on the other hand,the figure for Japan increased.

In two years, from March 1993 to March 1995, the percentage of unemployment in the USA declined steadily from 7.0 percent to 5.5 percent. It fluctuated slightly in next 2 years then remain static at about 5.0 percent in the last period.
On the other hand, the figure in Japan rose significantly, from 2.5 percent to nearly 5.0 percent in the period between 1993 and 1998. After this period, the unemployment rate remained stably at 5.0 percent from March 1998 to March 1999.

In conclusion, although the percentages of unemployment in the USA and in Japan fluctuated sharply from 1993 to 1998 , both of them remained stably at 5 percent from March 1998 to March 1999.

Jul 01, 2016
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PLEASE CHECK
by: Anonymous

INTRODUCTION

The given line graph illustrates a significant comparison between USA and Japan on the rates of unemployment over a period of 6 years from 1993 to 1999.

Jul 01, 2016
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CONTIUATION
by: Anonymous

OVERVIEW

Overall analysis suggests that Japan had a dramatic increase in the unemployment rate,whereas the statistics gradually declined for USA.However,at the end both countries were on a level as they reached the same percentage by 1999.

Jul 07, 2016
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line graph(pls correct)
by: Anonymous

The line graph gives information about the percentage of unemployment in two different countries( USA and Japan) within March 1993 to March 1999.

In summary, the unemployment rate among Americans declined over the period while that in Japan increased gradually. The line graph for both however, experienced some minor fluctuation along with it in general.

In March 1993,at approximately 7% rate, the USA was higher compared to Japan's percentage of a mere 2.5% rate in terms of unemployment. However, from then, the number of Americans who were unemployed deflated over the period wherein they went down to less than 5.5% from 1997 and end at a 5% rate in the final year.
By contrast,people in Japan,who had a minimal rate of unemployment in early year showed an upward trend on the line graph. As seen from the graph,the unemployment rate underwent into a massive increase reaching up to marginally 5% in 1998,in which it leveled into that of the USA. Their number ended then at a about 5% in March 1999.

Sep 06, 2016
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by: Anonymous

The line graph compares the rates of unemployment in the US and Japan over a period of six years, from March 1993 to March 1999. It is evident from the graph, that the two countries have opposing patterns where the US displayed a downward trend while Japan showed an upward trend in the proportion of unemployment of the workforce.

To begin, in March 1993, the unemployment rate of the US stood at 7% of the workforce,which was far higher than the respective figure of Japan, which was only 2.5%. However,over the next 5 years,in spite of some fluctuations, the US experienced a gradual decline in the unemployed percentage to reach a low of 5% in 1998.

In contrast, with some minor variations, the number of people who were unemployed in Japan grew notably from 2.5% in 1993 to be the same as the US in 1998.

Since then, the rates of unemployment in both countries remained stable at 5% for the remainder of the time period.

Sep 14, 2016
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Awareness about the pattern of task 1
by: Arsh

Well according to writing pattern of task 1, it is necessary to mention the type or name of graph.

Oct 05, 2016
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Please, check my writing because it is too rookie. and comment...
by: Khusbu

This line graph compares the percentage of unemployment rate in US and Japan. The whole graph presents the unemployment rate recorded between March,1993 to March,1999. US unemployment rate reduced in whole chart from 7.0 to 5.0. While, Japan has unemployment rate increased from 2.5 to 5.0.

Unemployment rate in US has slashed from 7.0 percentage in March,1993 and continued to reduce during preceding years. However, Unemployment rate in Japan burgeoned from 2.5 percentage in March 1993 by showing sudden spike in percentage. During three following years in US, unemployment rate tried to increase by some margin but get reduced by more margin as increased previously. On contrary, in japan, unemployment rate increased with more margin then it decreased up to March, 1998. In March 1997 to 1998, rate in US remain constant within fluctuation.

Overall, The unemployment rate attained the same percentage in March,1998 and remained equal to the next year. This final percentage obtained unemployment rate in US and Japan reached approximately to its mean value of their difference in their starting percentage.

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