How can I improve my coherency for the IELTS essay?
You know it seemed very easy to write essay at the first time when I’ve started writing task 2 however when I submitted my assignments to my tutor he told me that you can make your sentences clearly but there some mistakes with cohesion you should follow the rule.
What kind of vital advices can you give which could facilitate of my writing process.
Can someone comment on my coherence in this paragraph?
by leo liang
below is one paragraph about negative effect by IT, which i write for practising my coherence
Technology has led to significant improvements in people’s life, do u agree or not?
A particularly dire effect of developments in technology is lack of family bonding. This is because people’s behavior has been changed by modern technology. For example, in recent years the younger generation tends to enjoy their time on their online life such as checking facebook rather than interact with their families at their free time. If they expose to this situation for long time, they may only live in their own virtual world. As a result, it will not only decrease their communication skills, but also limit their social opportunities with people from outside.