Mobile Phone Essays

by Tia DS

Are mobiles dangerous? Are they necessary?

Are mobiles dangerous? Are they necessary?

There are social, medical, and technical problems associated with the use of mobile phones.


What forms do they take? Do you agree the problems of mobile phones outweigh the benefits?


Cutting-edge technology is part of daily life. One of the most important technologies which engage with people's activity is mobile phones. Some people argue that using cell-phones has dire consequences that result in some social, medical and technical dilemmas. While mobile phones become worse distractions, the benefits of these advanced devices are important to provide convenient lives for users.

There is no doubt that mobile phones change the way people maintain effective communication with colleagues. In this modern era, people are more likely to use mobile phones as the mean of communication rather than doing face-to-face communication. Recent research indicates that the majority of people in cosmopolitan cities are completely isolation because they are bordered in the virtual communication.

In addition, the newly invented technologies, mobile phones, resort people to adopt sedentary lifestyles because they spend the rest of the time to surf internet and play online games. A result shows that in Indonesia, most inhabitants use internet more than 10 hours a day in terms of entertainment as a source of amusement. Obviously, this activity causes some illness such as myopia and obesity.

The innovation of some sophisticated technologies forces the reconstruction of technological infrastructure to support the availability of networking. In some developing countries, signal is the common problem that happens in some remote areas. In fact, the active users who live in radius 10 km from the cell-phone tower are difficult to gain strong signal. Consequently, the telecommunication service providers must concern to solve this problem.

On the other hand, mobile phones are the useful devices to communicate and do some tasks. Many students who study abroad rely on cell-phones to keep in touch with their family and friends in their home countries. In addition, utilizing of mobile phones makes life much more convenient as businessmen can send email anywhere and anytime that only requires internet connection. Moreover, some applications can spoil users in the terrible situation. For instance, in traffic congestion, music is the best companion to release stress so that people will need mobile phone to play some songs which are stored in the internal memory.

In conclusion, there are negative effects of mobile phones that can interrupt humans' lives in social, medical and technical problems. Despite its drawbacks, mobile phones provide the flexibility in term of communication. Where possible, to avoid those problems, people should pay more attention to their circumstances to mitigate problems.

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Mobile Phones and Children

by Rony
(Egypt )

The dangers and complexities of the modern world have made the mobile phone an absolute necessity for children.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Last years have witnessed an increase in the number of threats and problems that unusually endangered children. In spite of being convinced that mobile phone might serve securing the child, I don't think it is an absolute importance.

To start with the troublesome situations that might face the child to see how mobile phone could help him. First of all, threats that might endanger the child; kidnapping trials: the child could talk to his parents, or call for the police using his own portable phone, or falling in an emergency situation, like diabetic coma or asthmatic attacks Or getting wounded in the street he could also call his parents or ambulance. Second, complexities, that might be encountered these days, are for instance; getting lost while going school or home alone in this case making a call to his parents seeking help is very beneficial.

Some new mobiles has many beneficial applications like maps, how to make fast foods in the absence of working parents, these apps would give a hand to children.

To sum up, while complicated and threatening situations facing the child these days are rising, and mobile phones helpful applications and uses are increasing, I don't think that it is a must to give every child a mobile phone. As, this also, has its drawbacks on children, and not every family is leaving her child to face these problems alone.

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Aug 20, 2015
grammatical corrections
by: Anonymous

Need some grammatical corrections

Aug 21, 2015
I think
by: nano

- some formal academic lexis is used
- layout/paragraphing is clear
- not under-length
- some good ideas

however,
- needs a lot of attention to grammar
- formal academic style of writing does not employ contractions
- punctuation making is used unwisely making the reader unable to follow the ideas
- task is not full achieved: in the intro.,the writer says "..... I don't think it is an absolute importance ..." , the writer does not cover this argument in his essay.

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Mobile Phones and Children

by mae

can someone please proof read my answer to:

The dangers and complexities of the modern world have made the mobile phone an absolute necessity for children.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?


The ever changing society we live in these days is unfortunately acclaimed with increasing rates of crime making it a very unsafe place to live in for everyone. children safety is compromised where disturbing offences such as abduction and any kinds of abuse are more prevalent thee days. Due to this reason, the use of mobile phones particularly by children, have been considered as a must to address this issue.

Parents or guardians nowadays have supplied their own children with mobile phones as a means of a safety reassuring device. Both parties benefit more from the technical use of a mobile phone especially in conditions we live, where dangers can arise at any point in time. Should safety be compromised from children, they can easily contact their parents or other members within the family, and other appropriate persons, such as the police, who is also concerned of their well being. This easy communication access, allows for relatives or the receiver on the line to act for safety in a timely manner. Furthermore, parents have the ease of mind to their children's whereabouts. The high technology of mobile phones allow them to easily contact or be informed with updates about their children's day.

On the other hand, I believe such device is not a necessity for children in surviving this world evolved with crimes and complexities. Firstly, education can be provided to the young ones in regards to safety practices. This refers to knowing who can be trusted and not associating to strangers, never be physically in isolation and must be in large groups, and last but not least, informing them of where and who to go for safety, such as teachers, councillors or the police. These are very simple and cost effective, yet very effective ways in minimising and preventing dangers that can happen to children. Secondly, it is understandably important for parents to be aware of their children's day, however, constant communication which is considered as vital, can also interfere with these children's development of independence. Lastly, the use of mobile phones open endless opportunities of social and online gaming use, which can impact their interpersonal skills with other people and predispose them to violence. Evidently children are potentially imposed to dangers with their use of mobile phones.

To conclude, although the device provide security for children while living in a troublesome and complicated world, I strongly believe it is unnecessary and inappropriate for children to own a mobile phone. Education and proper guidance should be provided for these children in order to live safely in this kind of environment we live in.


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Aug 16, 2013
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by: Anonymous

the essay is way too long...I don't think the length of essay should be more than approximately 280 words.

Aug 22, 2013
Not a through edit by no means
by: Anonymous

I HAVE TO USE CAPITAL LETTERS FOR CORRECTIONS. I have skimmed quickly. There are likely more corrections to be made than what I have indicated.

ever-changing is one word.
acclaimed – you have used the wrong word.

children’s safety – you missed the apostrophe. You also have typos which I have not corrected.

Due to this reason, the use of mobile phones particularly by children, have been considered as a must to address this issue. 

 HAS been, not HAVE been

Parents or guardians nowadays have supplied their own children with mobile phones as a means of a safety reassuring device. **OWN – this word does not belong in this sentence

Both parties benefit more from the technical use of a mobile phone especially in conditions we live *IN, where dangers can arise at any point in time. **MORE does not belong in this sentence.

Should safety *OF CHILDREN* be compromised, they can easily contact their parents or other members within the family, and other appropriate persons, such as the police, who is also concerned WITH their well being.

This easy communication access, allows for relatives or the receiver on the line to act for safety in a timely manner. **AWKWARD SENTENCE.

Furthermore, parents have the ease of mind IN REGARDS TO their children's whereabouts. The high technology of mobile phones allowS them to easily contact THEIR CHILDEN or be informed with updates about their children's day. 

On the other hand, I believe such device is not a necessity for children in surviving this world evolved with crimes and complexities. **EVOLVED – wrong word. U can use riddled.


Lastly, the use of mobile phones openS* endless opportunities of social and online gaming use, which can impact their interpersonal skills with other people and predispose them to violence.

Children are potentially EXPOSED to dangers with their use of mobile phones. 
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IMPOSED IS THE WRONG WORD.
Evidently? Why evidently?

To conclude, although the device provideS* security for children while living in a troublesome and complicated world, I strongly believe it is unnecessary and inappropriate for children to own a mobile phone. Education and proper guidance should be provided for these children in order to live safely in thE* kind of environment we live in. 


Sep 01, 2013
thanks
by: mae

thank you :)

Oct 29, 2014
thanku
by: kunal

thank u

Oct 19, 2016
hello i am a new to IELTS and I want 7 or more band in writing could you please comment on my essay, and how can I improve my writing
by: Anonymous

The dangers and complexities of the modern world have made the mobile phone an absolute necessity for children.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Mobiles phones now a day’s becoming an absolute need for the children, due to risks and difficulties posed by the modern world to them. I am partially agreed with this viewpoint.

To begin with, the troublesome situation that might be face by the children, while going to school or playing outside in the parks, the mobile phone technology could be very useful in case of any emergency faced by them, for suppose in case of abduction attempt, child can communicate with their parents and can send them the accurate location, in addition he or she can call the emergency helpline services, the contacts number of which are already saved on the phone by the vendors. Furthermore, having child an access to mobile phone could be beneficial for the parents as well, like, in case of medical urgency experienced by the parents, the child can call the paramedics and medical team to reach at the scene quickly.

However, there are many benefits of child having the mobile phone, there could be some adverse effects of it. For example, if the child is using the mobile phone while crossing the road could jeopardize the child life. In addition the radio waves produced by the phone could be detrimental for the children. Moreover children could betrayed easily by the hackers on the phone by sending them surprising emails and phone call where a child could share personal information like bank account information of the parents.

In conclusion, the mobile phone technology is beneficial in terms of child security and location, however the hazard associated with this technology should not be overlooked.


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