Multiculturalism Essay


In multi-cultural societies, people of different cultural backgrounds live and work together.

Do you think the advantages of multi-cultural societies outweigh the disadvantages?

Globalisation has given the world to come closer and today we can experience several cultures staying and working at a common platform. A multi-cultured group brings a wider area of learning, celebration, and a well living environment. Similarly it creates some resistance in the society because of certain group of people being bigot. I think a place with people carrying so many cultures has a enormous benefit than drawback.

When several cultures come together we all feel happy in learning new languages. We participate in events and festivals. This brings people coming closer to each other and adopting new style of living and working. Some of the orthodox style are replaced by new and pragmatic way. For example, In India we had a brutal ritual of burning lady who lost her husband. This was objected by the British empire first and later got stopped. Similarly the language which is in demanded across the globe, been learnt by Indians. The advantage of it is very evident now.

Having said that, mixed culture also creates a lots of hindrance mainly by the people in the society who are not open to learn and accept. Bigot people are pivotal for such situation as they abhor others culture. They initiates and participates into a negative aspect of racism where people fight and in some instances becomes the reason of riots among different cultured groups. However this is only when we have more people with less knowledge and are illiterate.

In conclusion, despite of some challenges which a mixed cultures can bring to the society can not overweight the benefits. The evolution of our race and the world we see today is the result of different cultures being together exchanging the knowledge and way of living.


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Aug 28, 2016
good essay
by: Lion

good because it had some difficult words i didn't know

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