Sports Essays

by matias tonti
(Shenzhen)


Hi Guys it is my first time to share my writing. Need to score a 7 so any help or comment to improve my writing will be really appreciated. Cheers

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Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think is fully justified while others think it is unfair.

Discuss both these views and give your opinion.


Nowadays, it is acknowledged that sport professionals earn huge salaries that exceed other respected professionals by far. This situation has sparked a heated debate with opinions on both sides, in favor and against.

Some people argue that is irresponsible to pay such amount of money to people who has just borned with a natural gift to play certain sport. They believe this is unfair for other professionals that spent several years studying hard and have to deal with really serious situations daily. Doctors, engineers, fire fighters among others, are clear examples of this unbalanced situation. Furthermore, we are setting a bad example for the youngsters as they grow up witnessing how our society do not reward the hard work.

Nevertheless, other people assert that athletes deserve their salary. They have a very short career, as can only play at highest performance during very limited amount of years. Normally sport players above thirty five are consider old to keep playing professionally. Moreover, they have a big responsibility as are requested to perform their best in every single game. It is their job to strive until see their team win, there are millions of dollars involved in each game. Companies invest a lot of money to sponsor teams and this creates an extra pressure on the players.

In a nutshell, I believe that athletes deserve a huge compensation for their work. Even though it is true that they have been naturally gifted however they still need to train hard every day to perform their best and help the sponsors to boost their brand value hence increasing the selling.

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Jul 02, 2014
teacher's remarks
by: misbah waqar

You have really done a very good job. It is a well organized essay. You have used complex sentences which can easilly enable you to get 7.

Mar 08, 2017
great job
by: Anonymous

i love this article. its so helpful i was able to create a report on this. thanks so much.

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Earnings of Sports Professionals

by Anu verma
(Ludhiana India)

Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think is fully justified while others think it is unfair.

Discuss both these views and give your opinion.


It is irrefutable fact that games are the symbol of prosperity and wealth of a nation. Nowadays athletes are paid with higher wages as compared to other weighty professions. It is due to certain reasons.Prior to opine, it is necessary to discuss the importance of sports as well as other career options.

To embark with, there are various professions which highly attract human beings such as doctor, engineer, astronaut etc. These all professions need hard work with concerted efforts.These profession are related to the well being of society and lead to many new discoveries for mankind. Albeit, these are highly respectable professions yet government does not pay them according to their working hours. By doing this state authorities are giving false impressions and somehow encouraging biasness. In future these issue can sparkle numerous debates and adversely affect to economy of a country.

On the flip side, people who think that sports-persons should paid highly, they must support the fact that sports persons career is of short duration. They start almost after 20s and continued to play efficiently up-to only 35years. Secondly, they need more salary to maintain their physique and to enhance their sport skills. To illustrate, athletic persons need balanced diet, gymnastic facilities, sports equipments to practice regularly. Next, they win various championship to make their nation proud and make their country respectable among other nations.finally,they also work harder than other professions when do practice in ground despite of sunlight or winter season difficulties.

In compendium and In my opinion it is undoubtedly fair to give huge pay to sport persons in order to meet their basic needs or to maintain their lifestyle.

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Dec 06, 2014
My comment
by: Sara

Hi Anu,

I have read your essay, I think it is really good. it is easy to read and you met all the task achievement.

I think it is better to make your word more easy. For me, I find the second body paragraph is much more easy to read and follow. For the first body paragraph, you used really difficult words, so I do not know if it use them correctly or not.

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Oct 23, 2016
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Feb 08, 2017
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Banning Dangerous Sports

by Denis

Some people think that dangerous sports should be banned, while others disagree.

Do you agree or disagree?


From the evidence of the history, dangerous sports have been more preferred by people than other competitions. Despite this fact, some people hold the opinion that these deadly sports should be banned as they may hurt athlete’s health and even ruin their lives. I disagree with this view and believe that such sports can easing international tensions and bring people together.

Firs of all, the history has shown that extreme competitions could even interrupt battles and nations together to stadiums. From the ancient world, when Greeks and Romans would leave battlefields to participate in the gladiators games. To the modern politics disputes, when athletes from Israel and Palestine would forget their differences and compete fair and peacefully in martial games. Moreover, these sports usually attract the world’s attention that could force leaders to stop their disputes and review options to make partnerships with the opponents.

Secondly, dangerous sports can bring people with different background together. For example, my country is a multicultural one, but, people are still divided into ethnical groups. However, MMI fights is a national sport and people with different culture and believes would support together our sportsmen and sportswomen during the season. It is clear that these competitions greatly benefit our community teaching the citizens tolerance.

Nevertheless, it is impossible to ignore arguments against dangerous sports. It is obvious that there is a huge risk for athletes, but the event organizers could improve rules and safety equipment to reduce this risk and to make such sports less dangerous.

In conclusion, banning dangerous sports can bring more disadvantages than benefits. In my opinion, we should focus on improving facilities, standards and rules for these sports to minimize the risk.

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Sep 26, 2016
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by: Anonymous

nice one but not high level of vocabulary

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International Sporting Events

by Dr.Khurram

Popular events like the Football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tension and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way.

To what extent you agree?


Each year international sports events held through out the world.Through out the history it can be seen that they bring together people belonging from different cultures and regions. I certainly agree that these sports events such as football world cup and cricket tournaments not only helps in improving international relationships between different countries but also help people in expressing devotion to their country and promote nationalism.

Generally in every geographical regions there are few nations that have disputes and they don't enjoy good diplomatic relations. Undoubtedly these sports competitions bring close together inhabitants of these countries. They get know positive aspects of each others that are mostly concealed by their government and media. For Instance India and Pakistan have tremendous diplomatic differences and also fought three wars but despite of this when international cricket series held each year it brings both nations close to each others. They support their favorite players and team irrespective of their nationality. And this type of sport events proved enormously beneficial in easing tension between two countries in last few decades.

Moreover these international events attract tourists from all over the world, which not only bring enormous revenue to hosting country but at the same time allow locals to learn from people of different cultural backgrounds. It also alleviate hostility between people belonging from different countries.Furthermore when people support their teams it rises their patriotic emotions and bring them together as a nation.

To sum up, international sport events such as Olympics and Fifa world cups are not only very beneficial for boosting international relations but also liberate patriotic feelings.

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Apr 03, 2017
Nice
by: Rahhul saini

Hi,

This essay has the same theme as I have faced in my last IELTS exam. All concerned thoughts are summarized in your essay, but in the introduction, there is the lack of thesis of two body paragraph in which one does mention own thoughts. Rest is super.

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Banning Dangerous Sports

by channa
(melbourne)

Some people think that dangerous sports should be banned while other disagree.

Do you agree or disagree?


Banning dangerous sports, such as motocross, bull run, hose riding is a controversial tropics from last few decades, but those dangerous sports failures are really horrible and critical, so that I will argue , life threatening sports have to be banded

Firstly I will explain, what are the major benefits of the basic sports such as cricket , table tennis or foot ball , That sport helps to enhance and maintain healthy lifestyle , even sports helps to ease the stress and bring happiness. But dangerous sports always increase the stress of contester because of the risky environment and it mostly enhances the fear instead of the happiness

Even not only that, due to the massive failure of the life threatening sports, contesters can permanently disable or it could be a chance to die, As a example, competitors who play boxing as a sport have more chance to affect in cancers in their face in the future, due to the massive impacts, which cause to distort the cell in their face, even motor sports contester have chance to be disable due to an accidents when they compete

Human life is unique resource to the world, so it should not be lost or disable by themself by doing dangerous sports, even dangerous sports not only put contesters life in risk, it makes contester’s family miserable and sometime it cause to damage the non relevant lives also, so having those points in to account, I strongly agree to ban the dangerous sports to save valuable human lives

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Sep 28, 2014
GUD
by: Anonymous

VERY NYC EXPLANATION

Jul 18, 2015
addition fact
by: rajat bajaj

we know that children are very much curious in nature and what they see, they try to do. so seeing these dangerous sport. They will try to do these thing at there own which is very dangerous for their lives.

Aug 15, 2015
My Opinion!!
by: Niks

Extreme sports has become leisure activity in many countries in the developed or developing world, but it has hidden risks too. As surveyed in 2000 and 2011, more than 4 millions injuries are attributed due to extreme sports. This essay will discuss about extreme sports are dangerous for one's life and should be banned.

Firstly, Extreme sports, all physical activities can help to improve health. People gain confidence and get feeling of well being after doing extreme sports. Lots of people enjoy to do these kinds of sports. "One man was die during bungee jumping" these kinds of news are common nowadays in newspapers. These kind of arguments raises the question that extreme sport should banned or not?

However, Extreme sports will proved fatal, if it is not done under experts guidance. One mistake or a person can maimed for whole life. Extreme sports required lot of time for practice as well as discipline. For instance, some kids start trying some kind of stunts to feel cool, and they get injured because they never gone through any training. These sports are expensive too, and people spend lots of money for few min of enjoyment. Some people do these sports just do upload their pictures on social media like face, twitter, or whatsapp and many more.

Taking above mentioned points, I am inclined to believe that extreme sports are full of danger. The drawbacks of overshadow the sportive of extreme sports. Extreme sports should be banned.

Jan 05, 2016
I agree
by: Cheyanne

I agree they should ban extreme sports right away and it will make them risk their lives and it could cause death or distorts in their face and distorts in their face and future to the cell.

Mar 01, 2016
nooo
by: RAYGIRL

EXTREME SPORTS SHOULD BE BANNED

Mar 15, 2016
noice
by: Anonymous

good

Apr 05, 2016
Worth The Risk
by: Anonymous

I feel that we should keep dangerous sports, even though they are very risky. I mean what is life living for if you don't take a risk once in a while. This is a free country and just because you think they are dangerous, you can't stop them from taking the risk. You don't have to do a dangerous sport. But don't ban it just because of your own opinions. I am a gymnast myself and I understand the risks but if you train well and be confident with yourself you can do anything. And if you are motorcycling just wear a helmet and take precautions and you'll be fine and will have the time if your life.

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Youth and Sports Competitions

by magi
(tehram)

Some people believe that sport competitions are a source of emotional stress for young people. Therefore, youth should be banned from participating in sport competitions.

Do you agree or disagree?


Whether it is a sport match or an academic test, competition has always been a preponderance part of life and it contribute to immense pressure for all ages; consequently, there is no escape from rivalry. From my point of view, l strongly disagree with this argument that prohibiting adolescents from participating in sport competition for the sake of alleviating emotional stress.

To start out, restriction in certain activity cannot prevent from emotional distress or intellectual involvement, or promoting another skills. Broadly speaking, studies have shown students who do not associate in competition are vulnerable than some of whom are active in sport events. To be more specific, pressurized sport condition not only make them stronger against tough situation in future but also it shape their characters so sociable. As a case in point, if they be a member of Football, volleyball or basketball team at school or be a individual sport they would learn team working, respect for the rival and understanding concept of defeat and triumph; furthermore, they would enjoy better mental and emotional health.

In conjunction with the influence of participating in competition the undeniable role of physical fitness improvement should not be underestimated when this issue is dealt with. Generally put, apart from health benefits that sport activities brings for them, physical health and fitness is one of the most substantial factors for mental and intellectual health. To illuminate, regular as well as professional exercise in order to improve physical fitness and motivation is indispensable for participating in competition. it is a immense discrepancies between youngsters that cause make them so successful in education and life.

To conclude, as far as I am personally concerned, there is no justification for banning adolescents form participating in sport competition. Notwithstanding the high level of stress in this events, the advantages is so remarkable than disadvantages.

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Oct 11, 2016
opposite view
by: Anonymous

In this essay opposite view is absent.


Nov 06, 2016
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Nov 11, 2016
plurals and singulars
by: Chichi

hi. your essay contains strong vocabulary and flows really well. however you need to take note of plurals ie the 'advantages' are instead if is. singulars are followed by is plurals are..

otherwise the rest is fine.

P.s even though you strongly disagree with the idea, you were supposed to give a passage that agrees with the topic.

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