Task 1: Line Graph - Unemployment in US and Japan

by mehreen

THE GRAPH SHOWS THE UNEMPLOYMENT RATES IN THE US AND JAPAN BETWEEN MARCH 1993 AND MARCH 1999.

THE GRAPH SHOWS THE UNEMPLOYMENT RATES IN THE US AND JAPAN BETWEEN MARCH 1993 AND MARCH 1999.

The line graph compares figures for unemployment in America ad Japan over a period of six years.


Overall, the unemplyment rate was higher in Japan,compared to the US. However,the proporion of workforce in Japan rose steadily between March 1993 and March 1999, while the figure for America fell.

In March 1993,US had 7% of workfore, in comparison with, only 2.5% in Japan.Between 1993 ad 1997, the American workforce showed a downward trend,whereas the figure for Japanese had un upward trend.

By March 1996,the unemployment rate increased in America as the percentage of workforce fell gradually, reaching 5.5%. By contrast, in Japan, the unemployment rate decreased as the figure for workforce rose steadily,becoming above 4%.

The percentage of workforce in America fell over next three years,reaching 5% in March 1999. There was an overall fall of 2% in the US workforce over this period of six years.

On the other hand,the proportion of Japanese workforce rose over to 5% in march 1998. The figure plateaued between March 1998 and March 1999. There was an overall rise of 2.5% in workforce over a period of six years.

It is interesting to note that both the US and Japan had 5% of workforce by the end of the period shown.

I am note sure whether I ve interpreted this graph correctly.iam

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The line graph compares figures for unemployment in America and Japan over a period of six years.

Overall, at the beginning of the period, the unemplyment rate was higher in Japan US compared to the US Japan. However, the propotion of the workforce unemployed in Japan rose steadily between March 1993 and March 1999, while the figure for America fell.

In March 1993, US had 7% of workforce unemployment, in comparison with only 2.5% in Japan. Between 1993 and 1997, the American workforce unemployment rate showed a downward trend, whereas the figure for Japanese had an upward trend.

By March 1996 (don’t do this, it will be confusing – you got to 1997 in the paragraph above, but now you have gone back a year. This will make it difficult to follow), the unemployment rate increased in America as the percentage of workforce fell gradually, reaching fell to 5.5%. By In contrast, in Japan, the unemployment rate decreased as the figure for workforce rose steadily, becoming reaching above 4%.

The percentage of workforce unemployment in America fell over the next three years, reaching dropping to 5% in March 1999. There was an overall fall of 2% in the US workforce over this period of six years.

On the other hand, the proportion of Japanese workforce not working rose over to to over 5% in march 1998. The figure plataeud plateaued between March 1998 and March 1999. There was an overall rise of 2.5% in the workforce the number of people not working over a period of six years.

It is interesting to note that both the US and Japan had 5% of workforce unemployment by the end of the period shown.

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Further comments:

You have to always look carefully to make sure you have identified the correct topic of the graph. You refer to the workforce, but you should be referring to
unemployment as this is what is being shown with the percentages.

I think you may have got mixed up when you analyzed the graph and misunderstood it. On the left axis it is referring to the 'percentage of the workforce who are not working'.

reaching = this is for something going up

There are a lot of corrections on your graph, but it is not as bad as it looks! You do have some good language in there, a lot of the errors have come from you misunderstanding the graph.

Review the language used for writing about 'change' as you do make some errors with this.

You need to vary your language a bit as some of your structures are a bit repetitive as well.


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Feb 21, 2013
PLS look at my report for the same topic
by: Bublok85

The line graph illustrates the trend of unemployment in US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999.

According to the picture it is clearly that there was a significant gap between unemployment rates in mentioned countries. But, the figures became approximately the same at the end of the period.
Starting from 2.5 unemployment rate in Japan increased gradually and peaked in late April 1996 at 4.4%.

After a slight decrease in May we observe the recovery at the end of 1996. The percentage of unemployed people in Japan increased just fewer than 10% and reached 5.3% the same percentage as in the US in May 1998.

The unemployment rate in the US decreased unevenly from 7.0% to 5.3% between 1993 and 1998. During the following year the unemployment rate declined at the beginning and rose at the end of 1999.

Overall, we see the opposite trend for unemployment in the US and Japan until May, 1998. After that there were the upward trends for both countries.

May 22, 2014
Score
by: Anonymous

So how much the score ?

Jul 08, 2014
score
by: Anonymous

the is the easy getting 7-8 band score

Jul 18, 2014
someone gives me feedback, plz :d
by: Anonymous

The graph compares in percentage terms the unemployment in two selected countries, namely the USA and Japan, over a six-year period from March 93 to March 99.

Overall, it can be seen that although the unemployment rates in the USA was far higher than that in Japan at the beginning, the former experienced the same figure as the latter at the end of the period.

From Mach 93 to March 96, while the percentage of unemployment in the USA decreased remarkably, going down from 7% to 5.5%, that in Japan rose sharply from just 2.5% to nearly 4.5%. After that, the unemployment rate in the USA fluctuated at around 5.5% until June 98. Regarding this rate in Japan, on the contrary, there was a steady increase, reaching a peak of more than 5% during the same period. To March 99, both two countries underwent a downward trend in the figure for unemployment, falling to exactly 5%.

Oct 24, 2014
my answer
by: siddhartha

The line graph represents the unemployment rates of us and japan over six years between march 1993 and march 1999. f It is evident from the line graph that unemployment rates of us was 7 percent,much higher than japan which was 2.5 percent in march 1993.the unemployment in us decreased steadily over the timescale to finish at 5 percent.whereas japan followed an opposite trend as its unemployment rates greadually increased to catch up with the us in march 1999 at 5 percent. f Thus the line graph focusses on the increasing unemployment rates in japan during the 6 year timespan during which the us managed to significantly lower the same.

Feb 15, 2015
Task 1: Line Graph - Unemployment in US and Japan
by: ADEEL

workforce unemployed; it should be unemployed workforce.

May 16, 2015
Please check this out and rate it
by: Anonymous

The line graph indicates the unemployment rates in the USA and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999.

It can be seen that unemployment rates in the USA continuously fell over the period of 6 years, whereas that in Japan rose. Overall, in the last year, both leveled off roughly at the same rate.

In 1993, the unemployment rate in the USA was 7%, it, then, had dropped at about 6.4% by the end of the year, while, that in Japan was 2.5%, but rose up to 3.5% in the same year. After that, US had a continuous fluctuation, decreasing at 5.5% in 1995. In the same year, Japan recorded almost 3.5% unemployment rate, having a negligible fluctuation in the previous year.

Interestingly, there was an upward trend at almost 4.5% in Japan in 1995, while, US had a downward percentage(5.5%), having a slight rise in the last year. US continuously had a slight change in the unemployment rate over the next year, reaching 5.0% in 1999. Similarly, the same rate was recorded in Japan, having a fall at 4.0% after 1996 and fluctuations over the previous years.

Aug 04, 2015
unemployment in Japan and US
by: thomas

The line graph shows the comparison of unemployment rate in the US and Japan in percentage over a six-year period.

Overall, the unemployment among Americans declined, starting from 7.0% in March 1993 to 5.0% in March 1999. On the other hand, Japanese unemployment gradually increased with only 2.5% unemployed in March 1993 to 5.0% in March 1999. Although ending at the same percentages of unemployment rate in March 1999, American unemployment decreased by 2.0%, while Japanese unemployment increased by 2.5%.

In the US, there was a steady but significant decrease among unemployed citizens from the initial number of 7.0% in March 1993, it went down at 6.0% in March 1996 and March 1997 and at 5.0% in March 1996 and March 1999.

The Japanese, however, had a noticeable increase from only 2.5% in March 1993, it went up to a little higher than 3.5% in March 1996, 1997 and 1998, and where it ended at 5.0% in March 1999.




Oct 01, 2015
line graph
by: Flower

Amazing.

Oct 27, 2015
Can you please give me some corrections or feedback....thanks
by: Anne

The line graph compares the percentages of unemployment in the US and Japan from March 1993 to March 1999, a period of six years.

At first glance, it is clear that unemployment rates of the US and Japan are of opposite trend all throughout the given timeframe.

Based on the graph, the number of unemployed Japanese increased continuously over the period. From a measly 2.5% in March 1993, level of unemployment in Japan grew steadily in the succeeding years, with minimal fluctuations throughout the whole period, then peaked at just over 5% in March 1998 before finishing the period with 5% unemployment rate.

In sharp contrast to this, rate of unemployment in the US decreased considerably over the span of six years. At the beginning of the period, about 7% of Americans were unemployed which is far higher than that of Japan. This figure then dropped continuously in the following years, with slight fluctuations fairly similar to that of the Japanese, to finish at the same level with Japan at 5%.

Apr 12, 2016
sample
by: mary

the line graph illustrates information about the unemployment rates in two countries, US and Japan, from march 1994 to march 1999.

Both the countries had oscillations in rates of unemployment in a given period. Though, the rate of unemployed decreased in US, while, it increased in Japan in 06 years. It is also noticeable that there was significant difference between unemployment rate of these countries initially which reduced over a period until it became same by march 1998, followed, by negligible difference in later year.

The unemployment rate in US fell about 0.5% per year, thus, reduced from 07% in march 1993 to 5.5% in march 1995. It slightly rose near 06% during the subsequent year, however, declined back to 5.5% by the start of march 1996. Afterwards, it remained fluctuate little above or below 05% from march 1996 to march 1993.

On the other side, the unemployment rate went up from 2.5% to above 3.5% in one year and it remained same by the start of march 1995. Then, it dramatically grew to markedly above 4% till march 1998 and continuously increased until it became same as in us in march 1998 (little above 5%) and marginally dip to 5% in march 1999.

Apr 12, 2016
request for review
by: mary

kindly, review my sample answer for this graph and provides your valuable suggestion for improvement in it

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