IELTS Essay - Throw-Away Society

by Tam
(Vietnam)

Hi,

Can you evaluate this essay for me, please?

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Many people believe that the human society has developed into a throw-away society, which is filled with plastic bags and rubbish.

What are the causes and solutions?


It is not incredible to say that plastic bags and rubbish, if not treated properly, will make the world become a huge garbage land. Moreover, i believe that excessive usages and lack of awareness about environmental problems should be directly responsible for this.

Plastic bags, although their chemical elements can not disintegrate within a hundred year, have been produced and used with no control. After consumption, people oftens throw them and reused processes were not treated properly.Therefrom, with relentless manufacture, nowhere can you fail to see plastic bags and waste.

Another reason should be rooted by the weak awareness of human about this pollution. Residents, especially people who are knowledge-illiterate, have not deliberately perceived the pollution level of waste while government and big companies have just focused on developing the economy. It can be indicated that poor countries where most people were not received a good education about garbage’s effects have more amount of junk than the rest.

In order to disentangle this conundrum, creating recycled materials is always put high on solution list of priority. Plastic bags should be replaced by paper bags as well as after using, plastic elements need to be recycled for other purposes by a green system. Besides, giving and popularizing instructions in large to reduce garbage’s pollution may make a significant breakthrough in this field. For example, should schools teach students how to separate each type of waste, the recycle processes will be easier and society will be indeed cleaner.

In sum, customers should use plastic bags on a deliberate way as well as the pollution and the instructions for this need to be popularized in order to enhance human’s awareness. Whether our society has become a mess of junk depends on action of every single person in the planet. (295 words)

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Nov 29, 2017
Feedback to your essay
by: Gboyega

Let me start by commending your effort and boldness to subject your work to peer review. However, the topic of your essay was not clearly stated. I also believe that you could have done a better job with the introductory part of the essay. Lastly, keep the language and use of grammar simple, don't try too hard to please. The trick is to communicate in a manner that is clear enough to the examiner.

Dec 05, 2017
kindly critic - Throw-Away Society Essay
by: Hada

Humans have developed throwing rubbish and plastic bags in the society.

Many People dispose their rubbish and plastic bags in an indecent manner, and some of the reasons could be due to the fact that they are pure illiterates or semi illiterates. They do not have the proper education they need as to the side effects of their actions on the society, environment and nature at large.

Some other people do so just because they do not want to incur expenses on themselves, so they would rather do it the inexpensive way, which is throwing it on the roadside, into oceans, seas e.t.c. Yet there are still some more people that are just lackadaisical when it comes to disposal of rubbish and plastic bags, they absolutely see no reason why they can’t throw it anywhere they feel like throwing it at the time they feel like throwing it.
One more reason I think people do this is because the government policies are not strictly put in place and so they go unpunished. Some contractors and government bodies responsible for this also do not do what they need to do at the appropriate time. Fines and punishment should be meted out on defaulters; they can even be made to carry out some community work for free.

To resolve these issues, the society needs a proper education especially from a tender age to desist from such acts. Probably if the side effect on both human and nature is better explained to them, they would desist from practicing such acts. The bodies and individuals responsible for this should also stand up to their jobs, do it with all that they have within their capacity.

I also believe that if a lot of all these rubbish and plastic bags are recycled, it would be of greater impact to the society, the rubbish is reduced and then reused at a cheaper rate which in return saves people some money. The place of excellence cannot be over emphasized here, if each and every citizen have a culture of excellence right from their homes, it would show in the things they do in the society, help build a better place and make life and nature a more relaxed place to stay.

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