Rules for Building Houses

by Tony
(Vietnam)

Please provide feedback on this candidate's practise essay for the IELTS test

Some people think that new houses should be built in the same style as the older houses in the local area. Others disagree and say local authorities should allow people to build houses in the style of their own choice.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.


At the outset of cutting-edge sky scraper millennium, the way to construct the building is polarized whether it should be run with the conventional design or pursue the creative one. From my own perspective, millennials should have their own ideal freedom to design their house.

On the one hand, it is not underlying to dispute against the traditional design belonging to local areas. Due to the fact that these unique classic models are solely suitable for geographic traits in specific lands. Cottages, for instance, would be much more efficiently usable for mountainous regions, which are with unflatted surface, than these types of modernized human being. On top of that, these conventional architectures have been occupying both spiritual and cultural custom for some villages and countries, which is accreditted as special national identification, such as igloo in the South polar.

On the other hand, albeit value of outdated model, civilized man have been deploying any sector of our lives to adapt to the innovation of digital world, especially in architectural industry. The more creativity people utilize, the more harsh problems about local habitats are tackled. It seems logical tat ground breaking technology would support the house's owner to obtain thier dreaming house in any kind of geographic environment, even under the mysterious ocean. Additionally, only changing the constructional materials instead of holistic structure and appearance of their house, the national identificial characteristics and custom are still remained wel-known in all over the world.

As aforementioned explanations, citizens should spring theirselves and deploy thier mind to create their beloved settling place.

Comments for Rules for Building Houses

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Nov 14, 2018
Building Houses Essay
by: IELTS buddy

Sorry but I can't provide detailed feedback. The main thing I noticed
though is that it seems you are making it too complicated. It's
difficult to work out what the key ideas are in there that are
answering the question. In places I'm just not sure what you are saying.

I'd take a look at my site or others that explain how to structure an
essay and present your ideas clearly. You have some good vocabulary and grammar but it's not going to help you if your essay is not coherent.

Also be careful with grammar - you have a fragment: "Due to the fact that these unique classic models are solely suitable for geographic traits in specific lands". It's important you know how to write complex sentences correctly.

Nov 18, 2018
Rules for building houses
by: Anonymous

Sorry but I cant make out what you are trying to say in your essay.

Dec 02, 2018
Comment
by: Elshan

The second paragraph:

Tat = that
Tier = their

I like your use of words: groundbreaking technology and etc.

I don't like the paragraph sentence of the body baragraph #2.

In my view, you are probably trying to sound too fancy and overuse nice vocabulary. Thus, it is really hard to get your ideas.

I assume that your examiner won't give you a high score for this essay. Don't be discouraged though.

Dec 06, 2018
Reads like electronic translation from another language NEW
by: Joko

I suppose you might ask someone who knows Vietnamese learners if they can make sense of it, but it reads like something written in an L1, put through google translate and then appended with cohesive devices.

The paragraphs seem to have topic sentences and, supporting sentences with explanations and examples. It's hard to tell. The paragraphs look like they each are focused one side of the discussion. I think.

The conclusion, albeit short, at least serves its role without bringing up new points!

He has discussed both sides and expressed his own opinions in that millennials should have their ideal freedom.

Why only millennials? That could have better supported.

Dec 06, 2018
Reads like electronic translation from another language NEW
by: Joko

I suppose you might ask someone who knows Vietnamese learners if they can make sense of it, but it reads like something written in an L1, put through google translate and then appended with cohesive devices.

The paragraphs seem to have topic sentences and, supporting sentences with explanations and examples. It's hard to tell. The paragraphs look like they each are focused one side of the discussion. I think.

The conclusion, albeit short, at least serves its role without bringing up new points!

He has discussed both sides and expressed his own opinions in that millennials should have their ideal freedom.

Why only millennials? That could have better supported.

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