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May 31, 2016
Fine writing
by: Anonymous

Hello,

Firstly, be extra careful with your grammar. There are plenty of mistakes which can hinder you from getting a high score.

Secondly, your 3rd paragraph is confusing. Do you fully support, or partly concur with the idea of keeping those parks?

Finally, you should give more effort to write the conclusion. Don't just restate like that.

Anyway, it is a good essay, though.

Jun 04, 2016
Thanks for sharing your thoughts on the essay
by: Anonymous

Hello,

I really appreciate that you have read my essay and checked where I made the mistakes. You are right on the point that the 3rd paragraph seems to be ambivalent. I think that it should have been mentioned in the introduction whether I am going to write in the favor of having parks or against. I think that in the 3rd paragraph idea should have been extended.

I am bit confused about the task achievement. What if I do not write anything about the demolishing of the parks for making the room for others or for business, will this fulfill the task achievement?

Jun 07, 2016
The Use of Public Parks Essay
by: IELTS buddy

You are better to make sure you do address any points that are raised in the question as it could be seen to not be fully answering the question (thus getting a lower score for task achievement) if you do not.

So yes I would write about developing business and boosting economies.

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