October 2017 - Improving Essay Coherency & Cohesion

by IELTS buddy

The writing clinic today is going to improve your coherency for when you develop paragraphs.

You need to make sure your ideas flow well from paragraph to paragraph and within each paragraph.

Take a look at this essay. Six of the sentences are missing but they are below the essay.

Your job is to place the sentences in the correct place in the essay. If you want you can post your answers in the comments box below.

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Matching Sentences Exercise


Some people believe that educational qualifications will always bring success in life. Other people say that educational qualifications do not necessarily bring success.
Discuss both views and give your opinion


Some people find academic degrees or other training essential milestones for future success, while others believe that this does not guarantee future success and there are other success factors just as crucial. (1) ____________________________________.

(2) ____________________________________. With regards to a career, it makes a person more competitive as employers will generally seek people who are well-qualified for the best and most richly rewarded positions in their company. This is true for all types of work, be it as an accountant or lawyer or work in the building trade. (3) ____________________________________, as for some gaining more educational qualifications is not for work but instead leads to a sense of personal accomplishment and fulfillment.

(4) ____________________________________. In terms of work, many people study hard to become well qualified for but then fail to reach the heights of success that they expected. This is because in today’s world there is a high level of competition for many jobs and a high number of graduates or qualified people. (5) ____________________________________. ‘People skills’ are also very important and regardless of the level of qualifications, those who cannot get along well with others may be less likely to achieve the success they desire.

(6) ____________________________________. Other factors such as the current job market and personal skills are also factors of importance.
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Place these missing sentences into the essay. The words in red should provide a clue to identify where they should go.

A. On the other hand, it is not certain that success will follow.

B. Not only this, there are other skills needed aside from qualifications.

C. On the one hand, gaining educational qualifications is certainly a method with which to gain success in certain areas of life.

D. In my opinion, therefore, educational qualifications can bring success in life for many people, yet there are no guarantees this will be the case.

E. Personally, I take the opinion that success is not guaranteed.

F. It can also be viewed as bringing success in terms of one’s own development…

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Answers


1. E
2. C
3. F
4. A
5. B
6. D

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You can also see a model answer and lesson for writing the whole essay here:


Educational Qualifications and Success Essay


Comments for October 2017 - Improving Essay Coherency & Cohesion

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Dec 01, 2017
coherence
by: Anonymous

Thank you

Oct 29, 2017
OPINION
by: Anonymous

1.E
2. F
3.C
4.B
5.A
6.D

Oct 26, 2017
my idea
by: okeke perpetua

1 A
2 C
3 D
4 E
5 B
6 F

Oct 25, 2017
Order
by: Mido78

1-E
2-C
3-F
4-A
5-B
6-D

Oct 25, 2017
discussion
by: sujit

1. E
2. C
3. F
4. S
5. B
6. D

Oct 24, 2017
Answer
by: Anonymous

1. D
2. C
3. F
4. A
5. B
6. E

Oct 24, 2017
Improving Essay Coherency & Cohesion
by: Anonymous

1. E
2. C
3. F
4. A
5. B
6. D

Oct 24, 2017
Coherency & Cohesion
by: Anonymous

1 E
2 C
3 F
4 A
5 B
6 D

Oct 24, 2017
Responses
by: Robin

1-A
2-E
3-C
4-D
5-B
6-F

Oct 24, 2017
Improving Essay Coherency & Cohesion
by: Anonymous

1.E
2.C
3.F
4.A
5.B
6.D

Oct 24, 2017
OCTOBER 24, COHERENCY & COHENSION
by: Anonymous B.A

1. D
2. C
3. B
4. E
5. A
6. F

Oct 24, 2017
here they are
by: Condor

E
C
F
A
B
D

Oct 24, 2017
Coherency & Cohesion
by: Anonymous

E. Personally, I take the opinion that success is not guaranteed.

C. On the one hand, gaining educational qualifications is certainly a method with which to gain success in certain areas of life.

F. It can also be viewed as bringing success in terms of one’s own development…

B. Not only this, there are other skills needed aside from qualifications.

A. On the other hand, it is not certain that success will follow.

D. In my opinion, therefore, educational qualifications can bring success in life for many people, yet there are no guarantees this will be the case.

Oct 24, 2017
Facebook
by: Anonymous

1.E
2.C
3.F
4.A
5.B
6.D

Oct 24, 2017
My opinion
by: Anonymous

1.E
2.C
3.F
4.A
5.B
6.D


Oct 24, 2017
Essay coherency and cohesion j
by: Anonymous

1-E
2-c
3-A
4-F
5-B
6-D

Oct 24, 2017
Improving Essay Coherency and Cohesion
by: TG

Very important exercise to bring improvement for essay writing.

Oct 24, 2017
Solution
by: Andrea

1. E
2. C
3. A
4. B
5. F
6. D

Oct 24, 2017
Answers for missing sentences
by: Anonymous

1-E
2-C
3-F
4-A
5-B
6-D

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