Crime Essays

by Ali
(Iran)


Many people are too scared to leave their home because of a fear of crime.

Some people think that more should be done to prevent crime, whereas others feel that nothing can be done.

What are your views?



It is quite obvious that the rate of crimes are increasing day by day in all societies in the world, but I personally do believe that there are a lot which can be done by both the governments and the individuals to reduce the crimes in communities.

A lot of important measures, on the one hand, can be taken by the governments in order to reduce or even eradicate different types of crimes .First, governments can introduce more police forces everywhere to monitor people s activities and stop them from committing crimes. Second, the state can apply new technologies such as surveillance cameras in the streets, shopping centers, restaurants and all public places to cease criminals .Third, strict punishments on criminals can have really preventive and deterrent effects on all age groups in society , so by using harsh penalties like emprisonment,physical or financial punishments the rate of crimes can be decreased.

On the other hand, individuals in societies can be of great help to cut down on the number of crimes being committed. To my mind, the overwhelming majority of people tend to participate in activities assisting the government to keep the society a safe place for their own families and the others and for all age groups .Take as an example, most people by reporting the problems to police can play an indispensable role in crime-prevention activities. In addition, when people themselves care about decreasing heinous crimes in cities, it can be sort of a preventive action to harness well the situation in society by government as well.

To conclude, in order for a society to be a safe place to live in, all society members including the governments and people must take necessary measurements to keep it a crime-free place.



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Jan 26, 2017
excellent
by: Anonymous

I agree for what is being said we need to protect the society and our families against crime

Apr 08, 2017
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by: KillerHuller

It's great but there's one mistake. The spelling of IMPRISONMENT is written as EMPRISONMENT. Anyway It's great.

Jul 10, 2017
Some queries
by: Alpine witch

Very nicely written but if my understanding is correct:

Shouldn't there be three parts to the discussion?
First part dealing with people's view on How more efforts should be made to counteract the rising crime rate, a second part addressing how and why others believe not much can be done in this regard and a third part dealing with the writers views.

I see you've only discussed the solutions, I can't tell what promoted you to do so from looking at the statement to provide those (I'm still trying to get a hang of it).

In my opinion one is required to provide a simple two way view over the issue.

Also I dont see a paraphrased introduction, and what your essay will be dealing with. Can that be skipped?

Regards

Sep 05, 2017
stop crime
by: pooja

Crime spoils your families name and reputation so stop crime and about your family.

Oct 14, 2017
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Violent Crime and Youngsters

by Sara

Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some psychologists claim that the basic reason for this is that children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers.


To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?


It has been indicated by the latest researches that there are an increase number of violence crimes throughout the young individuals under 18 years old. The reason for this phenomenon as the psychologists believe is lack of emotional and social learning by the parents and teachers. Psychologically, there are two crucial factors that making teachers and parents careless about their young children and students ate the age of 18 in learning.

Parents and teachers treat adults in serious ways during the learning process for two points. First of all, they observe that these group of children do not need emotion and softness as younger children, and they really pay attention just on their academic studies and how to pass successfully from the school. Eventually, the relationships between parents, teachers and students become extremely hard without any love. Secondly, once the circumstance at the school or home is getting worse and under pressure for students, they start to hate every body around them and act negatively and violently against innocent. Consequently, teachers and parents cause people at age of 18 to be dangerous criminals in the society.

The other significant point is parents and teachers are less informative of excellent method of learning and teaching 18 years old students. Although there are several of resources that could teach people the intelligent approach of emotional and social learning for adult, these teachers are still not professional at it. In Canada for instance, Chapter, who is the famous library, sells the newest and easiest books of dealing with secondary schools students, yet criminal behaviors have reached the peak at schools, streets and public places. Lastly, this problem is difficult to be solved without increasing the awareness among teachers and parents of the importance of reading about emotional social learning.

In Conclusion, to decrease the number of crime violence among 18 years old individuals, parents and teachers should teach them in inspirational and friendly methods. I realize that strict communication and narrow education are the influential factors for making these youth criminals.

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Dec 07, 2014
Review
by: Edgars

Hi, Sara.

I assume that you are from Canada.

I reviewed your essay and found several grammatical mistakes.

First, I will write down every mistake that I found. I am not an English teacher and English is not my first language, but as much as I have read in English, those following details seemed incorrect. Capitalized words is the way I would write.

..crucial factors that MAKE/ARE MAKING teachers and parents careless about their young children and students AT the age of 18.;

..they observe that THIS group of children do not need need EMOTIIONAL and SOFT CARE, WHAT younger children HAVE.;

..how to successfully graduate school.;
..once the cirtumstanceS..;

..teachers and parents MAKE people at..;

..point is THAT parents and teachers are less INFORMATED of excellent learning and teaching METHODS FOR 18 years old..;

..thera are several resources..;

..learning for AND adult..;

..WHICH is the famous..;

..dealing with seconadary SCHOOL students, WHILE criminal BEHAVIOUR HAS reached..;

..problem is difficult to SOLVE without..;

..of crime AND violence among..;

..teach them in inspirational and friendly METHOD.;

About overall content and justification essay seemed good. However, in second paragraph, "first of all" should begin the paragraph, otherwise the first sentence does not make sense.

I think you should avoid using word HATE.

I would also suggest to look up for some synonyms for young adult, children, 18 year old.

Thanks for reviewing my essay.

Dec 07, 2014
reply for your comment
by: Sara

Thank you for checking my essay, and your comments are absolutely true, but it is difficult to notice them when you are writing quickly. How about my coherence and cohesive? I am asking you this question because I always have troubles with them. Also, if you did the exam and score 7 in writing, please give me some advices in practicing and for my writing to reach this score?

Thanks a lot.

Dec 11, 2014
Youth crime
by: P!n0y

The topic of the proliferation of juvenile criminal acts and its reasons has been a contentious issue, since the inception of the modern age. Although parents and teachers play a crucial role, it must not to be forgotten that the government should also play their part. This essay will examine both views.

To begin, since parents are the initial role model for a child, they hold the vital aspect in inculcating values which will guide the child through life. For example, if a child is properly nurtured during the start of development, this would lead to a better growth, thus making a person productive and may not contemplate any lascivious acts in the future. In addition, schools are said to be the second institution for not just education but also social growth. The curriculum, in part, should motivate the young minds to become an asset in the society. By showing inspirational movies, for instance, can ignite their endeavor to strive for the betterment of the community and, therefore, can make attributions in the future.

However, the authority should also impart some contributions to prevent this debacle of the youth. Since there are beneficial projects present, the government may encourage to commission infrastructure such as gym, sport's complex, football field and dance studios in promoting a healthy lifestyle. With this, much options would be rendered, thus, preventing virulent thoughts to arise leading to crime. A case in point, if the youth will spend a time in the gym, a beneficient outcome will be provided, therefore, averting the possibilty of negative process.

To sum up, i firmly beleive that in order to eradicate this predicament of the young, a synergestic effort should be formed from the parents, school, and especially the authorities for it to become successful.


Dec 26, 2014
very good ideas included by sara in this passage
by: mr sidhu

good

Dec 27, 2014
mr siduh
by: sara

Thank you very much for your comment
I'm happy to hear that from u
Did u do the test ?

Jan 26, 2017
awesome
by: jazzy

Great topic to teach youngsters that commiting crime is wrong they should know that if they commit crime they are doing the wrong thing. Thanks for the inspiring essay about crime.

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Causes and Solutions

by Samidha


In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing.

What do you think are the main cause of crime?

How can we deal with those causes?


In most of the third world countries, illegal acts are enhancing at a higher pace. More freedom for youth and poverty are the main causes for increasing crime. Strict laws and regulations, proper education & employment could be the some of the possible solutions for this problem.

Firstly, there are no restrictions for young people now a days. Adolescents are prone to commit crime as they think what they are doing is right. For instance, the cases being registered for rape turn out to be committed by an age group of 14-18 years. Secondly, in the under developed nations, poverty & unemployment seems to be another reason for offences like robbery & theft. For the greed of money, poor people tend to perform illegal acts. To exemplify, if we tune to any news channel, we’ll come across at least two such cases daily.

Now, let us discuss the possible solutions which could help reduce the crime rate. To begin with, any country should have strict laws and regulations against criminals. If a proper legal system is running, people would be frightened before doing any kind of unlawful act. The fear of hard punishment would restrain them from carrying out any kind of offence. In addition to that, industrialization would aid more & more people to get employment leading to a rise in income & hence reduced crime. Education & awareness to young children should be promoted by the government to help them understand the difference between right & wrong.

A ray of hope can be seen from the above solutions, if incorporated in a successful manner could diminish the illegal acts to a great extent. As explained above, every cloud has a silver lining. To conclude, in my opinion, harsh laws & punishment against criminals and better education & more job opportunities can be considered as effective ways to deal with these problems.

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Dec 09, 2015
Correction
by: Anonymous

Correct line - could be some of the reason

Jun 28, 2017
CRIME
by: Anonymous

CRIME: An action or omission that constitutes an offense that may be prosecuted by the sate and is punished by law.

In many counties crime is increase.The main reason behind this reason behind this growth is:

-Unemployment
-Rise the cost of living
-Drug
-Rise of population and limitation of resources
-Availability of information to do crime e.g TV AND INTERNET
-Reduction of harsher punishment for crime
-Rise of political reveries/hate politics
-Demolished of moral value
-Broken of families

NOTE:...THERE IS NO GREATER WEALTH IN THIS WORLD
THAN PEACE OF MIND
PREPARED BY EBENEZER NKYA

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Crime Prevention

by Lama
(UAE)

Crime is a big problem in the world; many believe that nothing can be done to prevent it.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?


The contemporary world has witnessed an increase in crime rates earlier. This is a prevailing and worrying aspect that made many to believe it's impossible to prevent it. However, in my own perspective, I think there are certain methods that could tackle these felonies and slash its growth.

It's essential to look up for the fundamental and the root cause of the dilemma. For example, the relationship between committing a crime and poverty should be considered; as poverty is increasing, crime rate is increasing too. Besides that, the social issue of unemployment can lead the individual or any party to commit a certain crime, such as robbery, human smuggling, drug trade etc. In addition, the rise in inflation number has a direct correlation with unemployment and poverty too. As a result, the prevailing scenario leads to insufficient availability of job opportunities for the nation. These people will tend to go off the tangent and become law breakers in order to afford money for their survival or other real purposes. Statistics have shown that dealing with bribes between people is specifically the most committed illegal act in today's world. And eventually, this is perpetuated to spread corruption and seize human rights in an unfair way.

Despite all the horrific crimes going on, genuine measures should be taken into account against those felonies to reduce crime rates in the region. Local governments should have determinable impacts on poor people to uplift their lives. This can be done by providing more jobs to initiate the economical industries to originate more job opportunities. The government of each city should also submit straight laws to the citizens. These law must involve strict punishments that oblige the offender to think again before committing any crime. Moreover, good moral education and parental guidance improves the individual's personal perspective and point of view in the society.

In conclusion, I think crime rates cannot be diminished but alleviate. And by considering some measures and precautions, the world would become a better place.

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Jun 02, 2017
Hi Lama
by: Anonymous6

From my own experience, I notice that you overused complicated words in many times specifically in verbs.

So I recommend you to use the simplest one in verbs, while in noun you can use complicated synonymous.

Thank you

Ayman

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Ex-Prisoners Advising Teenagers About Crime

by Fahad_a11

Please Evaluate and point out mistakes in my crime essay.

Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?


There is no doubt that crime rates have dramatically increased over the last few years. Some criminals managed themselves well while they stayed in prison. One of the reasons is that they have seen the problems and sacrifices they have to make. Some people argue that these are the best people to create awareness about crimes in teenagers. However, others state that a person with a criminal background will not a leave good impression on people's minds.

Firstly, it is the duty of governments and the people to identify the aspects of crimes in teenagers. After that, there should be workshops and seminars which highlight the consequences of committing crimes. It is also the responsibility of parents and guardians to have an eye on their children's activities. With little effort, one can stop many criminal activities in the surroundings.

Secondly, people who were the part of immoral doings become good citizens after prison so could help teenager in eradicating this sin. They have personally experienced all the suffering they have to go through after their crime. They know the possible reason, why and how youngsters are involved in such cruel doings. Their worlds would leave undeniable impressions on people's minds and will help to eliminate crime from the society.

To conclude, I strongly believe that once a criminal, not always a criminal. If one has regret about his past and has changed himself, one should be treated like a normal human being. Furthermore, they could help teenagers from crime while telling them about their sacrifices of time, health and family.

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Aug 28, 2015
vry gud
by: Anonymous

it is best way

Sep 03, 2015
Doing mistakes is not a crime, but not learning from it can be a crime
by: Anonymous

Doing mistakes is not a crime, but not learning from it can be a crime

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CCTV in Public Places

by Jamshid
(Namangan)


Please, I am going to take IELTS on 14th of March but still not sure about writing Task 2 so can you write feedback for a crime essay about CCTV in public places I wrote.

In many cities the use of video cameras in public places is being increased in order to reduce crime, but some people believe that these measures restrict our individual freedom.

Do the benefits of increased security outweigh the drawbacks?


Nowadays, with the world vigorously fighting against the crime, public surveillance devices i.e. CCTVs are one of the few tools to manage it. However, privacy concerns and social anxiety caused by CCTVs cannot be neglected and need consideration.

Initially, these devices reflect many encouraging advantages. To clarify, they can come in handy with top security matters and provide undeniable facts for the cases. Furthermore, with the presence of cameras in public places the upcoming crimes can be prevented as criminals will be scared of revealing their identity. So, this powerful tool can bring many benefits to the society.

On the contrary, there can be factor with the neutral benefit. As CCTVs reduce the labor cost by strengthening the economy and bringing profit, the unemployment and underemployment directly will be influenced though. Besides the hypothesis that human being replaced by technology will gain in reputation too.

Moreover, if used not appropriately CCTVs may serve for wrong purposes. The improper use of them for personal or political reasons cannot be impossible, can it? Also it is highly likely that using them in public places causes social anxiety associated with discomfort, moral pressure thus affecting the efficiency of the job. For example, you can talk, sing or hum while working which makes it interesting and under surveillance you simply cannot show this eccentric behavior which makes the work boring and inefficient.

On balance, CCTVs in public places would be such a good idea for our security and economy but some of the negative key elements should be taken into account before mass application of these devices in public places.

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Jan 24, 2015
Mechanical writing
by: Ray

Although there are few errors in your writing, the band score for Coherence and Cohesion will stay at 6 because of your use of linking phrases.

Talk with a tutor about the following writing criteria:

Band 6: "uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical"

A good tutor will help you understand why your rigid use of linking phrases may prevent you from achieving band 7.

Dec 02, 2015
Nice
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Good post

Jan 26, 2017
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Just wanna say great essay very inspiring.

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Reducing Crime

by das729

I know this is way over the word count. But I keep getting 6 on my writing. Can someone please tell me if this is okay for an essay?

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Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.


A lot of people believe we need to reduce crime. Some people believe we can do that by giving inmates longer time in prison, while others believe there are other ways we can accomplish reducing crime. This essay will explain both sides and give an opinion.

The first view states that people think we should give longer prison sentences. People believe if someone has committed crime they should stay in prison longer. We need to increase penalty rates by law. They did something wrong so the prisoners should have to pay for what they have done and therefore they will be staying out of trouble in prison. In prison they have programs that help inmates to make better decisions in life. For example, they have counsellor and can help people look at getting a trade job when they are released from prison.

The second view point says some people think there are other ways to reduce crime in the community other than longer prison sentences. One thing we could do is having groups put in the community. For example, making it mandatory that people who have committed a crime go to a counsellor. Another thing we could do is helping them get jobs and therefore they do not feel they need to commit a crime to get by in life. For example, people will steal because they may not be able to afford money for groceries.

In my opinion I believe there are other ways for people to receive the help they need so they do not commit crimes other than jail. No matter what people do not want to go to prison but they still end up there. We need to look at other ways for keeping them out. It may be the only thing they know and some prisoners spend half there life there. Keeping them in prison does not teach them anything, it just keeps them there longer but eventually they will get out and do the same thing again cause that is all they know.

In conclusion there are many different ways we can keep crime low. Some people believe longer prison sentences but I believe there is another alternative than that.

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Sep 13, 2017
joylcd - IELTS Essay - Ways to Reduce Crime
by: Anonymous

Certain people believe that a longer life imprisonment is the best possible way to eliminate the increasing criminality rate in our society, however, some believe that there are other ways to reduce the crime rate. In my opinion, it is necessary that the government will focus more about this issue. This essay will discuss the views and opinions about this problem.

Firstly,there are certain ways that usually applied to the inmates as part of the program that the Department of Justice and police department should implement. Like for instance, providing projects which enables them to be productive even inside the prison such as making lanterns during Christmas season, making a handicraft projects and more. In addition to this, this is one of the best ways in supporting their families in financial aspect.

Secondly, lengthen the time of sentences for the prisoner is also an alternative way of punishment, but it depends on how heavy or not the crime that has been committed by the convictee. Aside from that, it is one of the best solutions in prohibiting the person to get involve in the crime, the more higher the punishment is, the more it is for the criminals not to get involved in certain evil act which might cause trouble and danger to the innocent people.

To sum up,there are different ways that the government sector should implement for the safety and security of the citizen in the specific place. Thus, it is necessary to abide the policies and the rules to live in a peaceful and zero crime rate society.

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