Crime Essays

by Ali
(Iran)


Many people are too scared to leave their home because of a fear of crime.

Some people think that more should be done to prevent crime, whereas others feel that nothing can be done.

What are your views?



It is quite obvious that the rate of crimes are increasing day by day in all societies in the world, but I personally do believe that there are a lot which can be done by both the governments and the individuals to reduce the crimes in communities.

A lot of important measures, on the one hand, can be taken by the governments in order to reduce or even eradicate different types of crimes .First, governments can introduce more police forces everywhere to monitor people s activities and stop them from committing crimes. Second, the state can apply new technologies such as surveillance cameras in the streets, shopping centers, restaurants and all public places to cease criminals .Third, strict punishments on criminals can have really preventive and deterrent effects on all age groups in society , so by using harsh penalties like emprisonment,physical or financial punishments the rate of crimes can be decreased.

On the other hand, individuals in societies can be of great help to cut down on the number of crimes being committed. To my mind, the overwhelming majority of people tend to participate in activities assisting the government to keep the society a safe place for their own families and the others and for all age groups .Take as an example, most people by reporting the problems to police can play an indispensable role in crime-prevention activities. In addition, when people themselves care about decreasing heinous crimes in cities, it can be sort of a preventive action to harness well the situation in society by government as well.

To conclude, in order for a society to be a safe place to live in, all society members including the governments and people must take necessary measurements to keep it a crime-free place.



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Violent Crime and Youngsters

by Sara

Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some psychologists claim that the basic reason for this is that children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers.


To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?


It has been indicated by the latest researches that there are an increase number of violence crimes throughout the young individuals under 18 years old. The reason for this phenomenon as the psychologists believe is lack of emotional and social learning by the parents and teachers. Psychologically, there are two crucial factors that making teachers and parents careless about their young children and students ate the age of 18 in learning.

Parents and teachers treat adults in serious ways during the learning process for two points. First of all, they observe that these group of children do not need emotion and softness as younger children, and they really pay attention just on their academic studies and how to pass successfully from the school. Eventually, the relationships between parents, teachers and students become extremely hard without any love. Secondly, once the circumstance at the school or home is getting worse and under pressure for students, they start to hate every body around them and act negatively and violently against innocent. Consequently, teachers and parents cause people at age of 18 to be dangerous criminals in the society.

The other significant point is parents and teachers are less informative of excellent method of learning and teaching 18 years old students. Although there are several of resources that could teach people the intelligent approach of emotional and social learning for adult, these teachers are still not professional at it. In Canada for instance, Chapter, who is the famous library, sells the newest and easiest books of dealing with secondary schools students, yet criminal behaviors have reached the peak at schools, streets and public places. Lastly, this problem is difficult to be solved without increasing the awareness among teachers and parents of the importance of reading about emotional social learning.

In Conclusion, to decrease the number of crime violence among 18 years old individuals, parents and teachers should teach them in inspirational and friendly methods. I realize that strict communication and narrow education are the influential factors for making these youth criminals.

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Dec 07, 2014
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by: Edgars

Hi, Sara.

I assume that you are from Canada.

I reviewed your essay and found several grammatical mistakes.

First, I will write down every mistake that I found. I am not an English teacher and English is not my first language, but as much as I have read in English, those following details seemed incorrect. Capitalized words is the way I would write.

..crucial factors that MAKE/ARE MAKING teachers and parents careless about their young children and students AT the age of 18.;

..they observe that THIS group of children do not need need EMOTIIONAL and SOFT CARE, WHAT younger children HAVE.;

..how to successfully graduate school.;
..once the cirtumstanceS..;

..teachers and parents MAKE people at..;

..point is THAT parents and teachers are less INFORMATED of excellent learning and teaching METHODS FOR 18 years old..;

..thera are several resources..;

..learning for AND adult..;

..WHICH is the famous..;

..dealing with seconadary SCHOOL students, WHILE criminal BEHAVIOUR HAS reached..;

..problem is difficult to SOLVE without..;

..of crime AND violence among..;

..teach them in inspirational and friendly METHOD.;

About overall content and justification essay seemed good. However, in second paragraph, "first of all" should begin the paragraph, otherwise the first sentence does not make sense.

I think you should avoid using word HATE.

I would also suggest to look up for some synonyms for young adult, children, 18 year old.

Thanks for reviewing my essay.

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by: Sara

Thank you for checking my essay, and your comments are absolutely true, but it is difficult to notice them when you are writing quickly. How about my coherence and cohesive? I am asking you this question because I always have troubles with them. Also, if you did the exam and score 7 in writing, please give me some advices in practicing and for my writing to reach this score?

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Youth crime
by: P!n0y

The topic of the proliferation of juvenile criminal acts and its reasons has been a contentious issue, since the inception of the modern age. Although parents and teachers play a crucial role, it must not to be forgotten that the government should also play their part. This essay will examine both views.

To begin, since parents are the initial role model for a child, they hold the vital aspect in inculcating values which will guide the child through life. For example, if a child is properly nurtured during the start of development, this would lead to a better growth, thus making a person productive and may not contemplate any lascivious acts in the future. In addition, schools are said to be the second institution for not just education but also social growth. The curriculum, in part, should motivate the young minds to become an asset in the society. By showing inspirational movies, for instance, can ignite their endeavor to strive for the betterment of the community and, therefore, can make attributions in the future.

However, the authority should also impart some contributions to prevent this debacle of the youth. Since there are beneficial projects present, the government may encourage to commission infrastructure such as gym, sport's complex, football field and dance studios in promoting a healthy lifestyle. With this, much options would be rendered, thus, preventing virulent thoughts to arise leading to crime. A case in point, if the youth will spend a time in the gym, a beneficient outcome will be provided, therefore, averting the possibilty of negative process.

To sum up, i firmly beleive that in order to eradicate this predicament of the young, a synergestic effort should be formed from the parents, school, and especially the authorities for it to become successful.


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Causes and Solutions

by Samidha


In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing.

What do you think are the main cause of crime?

How can we deal with those causes?


In most of the third world countries, illegal acts are enhancing at a higher pace. More freedom for youth and poverty are the main causes for increasing crime. Strict laws and regulations, proper education & employment could be the some of the possible solutions for this problem.

Firstly, there are no restrictions for young people now a days. Adolescents are prone to commit crime as they think what they are doing is right. For instance, the cases being registered for rape turn out to be committed by an age group of 14-18 years. Secondly, in the under developed nations, poverty & unemployment seems to be another reason for offences like robbery & theft. For the greed of money, poor people tend to perform illegal acts. To exemplify, if we tune to any news channel, we’ll come across at least two such cases daily.

Now, let us discuss the possible solutions which could help reduce the crime rate. To begin with, any country should have strict laws and regulations against criminals. If a proper legal system is running, people would be frightened before doing any kind of unlawful act. The fear of hard punishment would restrain them from carrying out any kind of offence. In addition to that, industrialization would aid more & more people to get employment leading to a rise in income & hence reduced crime. Education & awareness to young children should be promoted by the government to help them understand the difference between right & wrong.

A ray of hope can be seen from the above solutions, if incorporated in a successful manner could diminish the illegal acts to a great extent. As explained above, every cloud has a silver lining. To conclude, in my opinion, harsh laws & punishment against criminals and better education & more job opportunities can be considered as effective ways to deal with these problems.

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Crime Prevention

by Lama
(UAE)

Crime is a big problem in the world; many believe that nothing can be done to prevent it.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?


The contemporary world has witnessed an increase in crime rates earlier. This is a prevailing and worrying aspect that made many to believe it's impossible to prevent it. However, in my own perspective, I think there are certain methods that could tackle these felonies and slash its growth.

It's essential to look up for the fundamental and the root cause of the dilemma. For example, the relationship between committing a crime and poverty should be considered; as poverty is increasing, crime rate is increasing too. Besides that, the social issue of unemployment can lead the individual or any party to commit a certain crime, such as robbery, human smuggling, drug trade etc. In addition, the rise in inflation number has a direct correlation with unemployment and poverty too. As a result, the prevailing scenario leads to insufficient availability of job opportunities for the nation. These people will tend to go off the tangent and become law breakers in order to afford money for their survival or other real purposes. Statistics have shown that dealing with bribes between people is specifically the most committed illegal act in today's world. And eventually, this is perpetuated to spread corruption and seize human rights in an unfair way.

Despite all the horrific crimes going on, genuine measures should be taken into account against those felonies to reduce crime rates in the region. Local governments should have determinable impacts on poor people to uplift their lives. This can be done by providing more jobs to initiate the economical industries to originate more job opportunities. The government of each city should also submit straight laws to the citizens. These law must involve strict punishments that oblige the offender to think again before committing any crime. Moreover, good moral education and parental guidance improves the individual's personal perspective and point of view in the society.

In conclusion, I think crime rates cannot be diminished but alleviate. And by considering some measures and precautions, the world would become a better place.

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Ex-Prisoners Advising Teenagers About Crime

by Fahad_a11

Please Evaluate and point out mistakes in my crime essay.

Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?


There is no doubt that crime rates have dramatically increased over the last few years. Some criminals managed themselves well while they stayed in prison. One of the reasons is that they have seen the problems and sacrifices they have to make. Some people argue that these are the best people to create awareness about crimes in teenagers. However, others state that a person with a criminal background will not a leave good impression on people's minds.

Firstly, it is the duty of governments and the people to identify the aspects of crimes in teenagers. After that, there should be workshops and seminars which highlight the consequences of committing crimes. It is also the responsibility of parents and guardians to have an eye on their children's activities. With little effort, one can stop many criminal activities in the surroundings.

Secondly, people who were the part of immoral doings become good citizens after prison so could help teenager in eradicating this sin. They have personally experienced all the suffering they have to go through after their crime. They know the possible reason, why and how youngsters are involved in such cruel doings. Their worlds would leave undeniable impressions on people's minds and will help to eliminate crime from the society.

To conclude, I strongly believe that once a criminal, not always a criminal. If one has regret about his past and has changed himself, one should be treated like a normal human being. Furthermore, they could help teenagers from crime while telling them about their sacrifices of time, health and family.

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Doing mistakes is not a crime, but not learning from it can be a crime
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Doing mistakes is not a crime, but not learning from it can be a crime

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CCTV in Public Places

by Jamshid
(Namangan)


Please, I am going to take IELTS on 14th of March but still not sure about writing Task 2 so can you write feedback for a crime essay about CCTV in public places I wrote.

In many cities the use of video cameras in public places is being increased in order to reduce crime, but some people believe that these measures restrict our individual freedom.

Do the benefits of increased security outweigh the drawbacks?


Nowadays, with the world vigorously fighting against the crime, public surveillance devices i.e. CCTVs are one of the few tools to manage it. However, privacy concerns and social anxiety caused by CCTVs cannot be neglected and need consideration.

Initially, these devices reflect many encouraging advantages. To clarify, they can come in handy with top security matters and provide undeniable facts for the cases. Furthermore, with the presence of cameras in public places the upcoming crimes can be prevented as criminals will be scared of revealing their identity. So, this powerful tool can bring many benefits to the society.

On the contrary, there can be factor with the neutral benefit. As CCTVs reduce the labor cost by strengthening the economy and bringing profit, the unemployment and underemployment directly will be influenced though. Besides the hypothesis that human being replaced by technology will gain in reputation too.

Moreover, if used not appropriately CCTVs may serve for wrong purposes. The improper use of them for personal or political reasons cannot be impossible, can it? Also it is highly likely that using them in public places causes social anxiety associated with discomfort, moral pressure thus affecting the efficiency of the job. For example, you can talk, sing or hum while working which makes it interesting and under surveillance you simply cannot show this eccentric behavior which makes the work boring and inefficient.

On balance, CCTVs in public places would be such a good idea for our security and economy but some of the negative key elements should be taken into account before mass application of these devices in public places.

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Jan 24, 2015
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Mechanical writing
by: Ray

Although there are few errors in your writing, the band score for Coherence and Cohesion will stay at 6 because of your use of linking phrases.

Talk with a tutor about the following writing criteria:

Band 6: "uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical"

A good tutor will help you understand why your rigid use of linking phrases may prevent you from achieving band 7.

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