IELTS Homeschooling Essay

by Rajiv joshi
(Jalandhar city ,state Punjab, India)

Homeschooling is better then school.


Do you agree or disagree?


It is irrefutable that study is an essential part of our life we can not survive in this modern world without sstudy nowadays people start a new trend of home schooling question rising the issue of what is more beneficial home schooling or school education in this eassay I will examaine both points and give my own opinion

First and foremost people believe that school education is better then home schooling the reason for this is that In school classes provide different teachers for different subjects which give students good education which they need secondly some parents are not well educated they dont know about their children study moreover some parents are busy with their job's they don't have time to give their children good education so they admission them in school

However some people believe that there's no need of school education because children can learn better by one to one education they can easily learn in that atmosphere in addition they believe that they can easily provide better facilities which their children need they will not get over stress wile studying at home

To wrap up I personally believe that school education is essential then home schooling because from school education children learn social skills as well as moral values for instance how to live in society how to deal with people moreover how to face diffrent circumstances in life so school education is better then home schooling.

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Oct 09, 2014
IELTS Homeschooling Essay
by: IELTS buddy

Hi,

The first major problem is you have no full-stops. I don't know why this is, but this will significantly reduce your grammar score.

Also, your ideas are not explained well enough. You need more details or examples to support them.

If you look at your second body paragraph, for example, there is very little explanation of your ideas there.

You have written about 250 words so you are on the borderline for not having enough words. So you need to write a bit more.

Thanks

Oct 09, 2014
Weak essay
by: Anonymous

I think this essay is weak because:

The candidate discussed both sides with no enough explanations, it would be better if he tried to explain on side with more details to support this view.

Also, there were many grammatical errors including the absence of full stops.

Oct 10, 2014
Errors of the Homeschooling Essay
by: Anonymous

This essay has no punctuation marks which is the main problem for the candidate. It is lacking coherence and high level vocabularies.

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