Working Women Essays

by Halim Abdelhalim
(Cairo)


Many high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 per cent female.

Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women.

To what extent do you agree?



Nowadays there is an intense debate concerning the ability of women to fill high-level positions in companies. A growing body of opinion recommends allocation of fixed percentage of these positions to women. In this essay I am going to discuss different views related to this issue.

It is undeniable that women in the time being have the ability to be qualified either educationally or practically to attain success in different branches and fields. Therefore, it is quite fair to get higher positions in their careers. Although this makes practical sense, it ignores a lot of social and physical obstacles that face women and interfere with efficient performance of them in such heavy duties. Such obstacles need gross efforts exerted by both the family and the government to provide immanent support to women to achieve success in their practical life.

Another fundamental point is that allocation of certain percentage for women getting higher position in companies as a quote is completely unfair. If women reach such precious position by low, they might become less active and less productive .Hence, it more wise to push women to be promoted by their efforts not by low. As well as also men would be depressed if we apply such policy.

To sum up, it is advisable to give the chance for women to share equally with men in the development of the community by reaching all the positions whatever are these. However it is my believe that, women should get such positions based on their efficiency not by making lows determine that.

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Reserving High-Level Jobs for Women

by Haldun
(Türkiye)

Men do most of the high level jobs. Should the government encourage a certain percentage of these jobs to be reserved for women?

Although gender discrimination is overcome in many areas, qualified jobs are still mostly occupied by men, due to discrimination in workplace and universities. In my opinion, governments should undertake the mission of overcoming this gender inequality.

To be a potential candidate for a high level job, being highly educated is considered as an obligation. However, number of male students in universities are significantly more than female students. Thus, there are more male candidates than female ones for qualified jobs. Another reason of this problem is discrimination against women in work places. In many jobs, employers think that female employees are not as capable as male ones; moreover, they see females as inferior. Because of these reasons men are chosen for high level jobs more often.

To end this discriminating act, governments should take certain actions, such as encouraging women to get higher education. For this purpose, governments can give scholarships to women, by this gender imbalance in universities can be prevented. Also, giving more opportunities to women such as studying abroad or taking part in researches can make them more qualified; furthermore, encourage them against their male peers.

To conclude, high quality jobs are done mostly by men, which is caused by discrimination in workplace and in education. However, with the financial and mental support of the governments this problem can be solved.

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May 11, 2016
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Need some improvements
by: Zeki

Hi,

In my estimation, your ideas relevant to the topic and generally your words are proper. One criticism about your essay, you need to use "To begin with, firstly, On the one hand" like that.

Thank you for share your essay with us.

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May 19, 2016
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Be more specific.
by: A maybe-lucky 8.0 writer

Hi there!

I gotta say that you have chosen a hard topic to write, and you've done it well.
But I think you need some ameliorations for this:

1. About 1st idea, actually I didn't get your point.

"However, number of male students in universities are significantly more than female students. Thus, there are more male candidates than female ones for qualified jobs."

It will be much more persuasive if you give the comparison between number of female scientist in early 20th century and 21st century. Doing this way, your point is clear about females' abilities have been overlooked too long and 'till now. More specifically, give the examples of female scientist like Marie Curie.

2. 2nd idea, come on, be more specific, man.

"In many jobs, employers think that female employees are not as capable as male ones; moreover, they see females as inferior."

Why? What are the jobs? It's easy. Because of the lack of physical strength of female's body. Structural engineers, construction engineers, architects, ... every job which required physical efforts counts.

3. 3rd paragraph, same opinion. Examples? European and the US is giving plenty of scholarships for women in poor African countries. The US government, in the effort of reconsidering women's ability, has initiated to put a female hero on the $20 bill.

I know when you write, pressure of time limits your thought. Also, this is a bit tough topic. But, in every IELTS essay, DON'T JUST WRITE THEORIES, GIVE EVIDENCES.

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Traditional Role of Women

by Chinita Mae
(Oman)

Some people believe in the traditional idea that the woman’s place is in the home, while others say that idea is outdated and that women should play an increasingly important role in the workplace of the future.

What is your opinion?


Primitively women's role is connected to house work, but others believed women's have more exemplary capacity to work outside home. In today's society it is clearly seen that women play's a big role not only in nurturing her family with love and care but also to excel in her fields of interest.

Women are capable of giving birth and that is a natural occurence that differs them from men. Experiencing the whole course of pregnancy plus labor and delivery put them in great danger,stress, and pain. But women can overcome all of this because of their innate courage and braveness.it is a clear evidence that women can surpass such a great test.

Great minds and heroes are also found in some women of our time, for example florence nightingle qouted as the lady with a lamp who served the wounded soldiers wheyback in the civil war, christianne amanpoure who is a great journalist of today or vanessa williams who is a undefeated tennis champion. They are just few of the many women who excel in different fields showing their care, compassion and talent.

Moreover God created man and women equal,therefore women can also perform work that man can do. Female's caring and loving nature makes them more dedicated to their work and become successful on their chosen field. Passion plays a big role on why women can do more other than household chores.

In conclusion women's play a huge part in the society not only to take care of her family inside her home, but also she has a position to work in a civilized society.

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Dec 28, 2015
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by: Anonymous

It's a great one but names should be capitalzed and u use possessive 's' when not needed. .. great job

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Perfect

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