October 2017 - Practice Writing Essay Introductions
by IELTS buddy
Yesterday's exercise was about learning to write introductions for IELTS essays.
It was based on this recent essay question for IELTS:
Many jobs that used to be done in the home by hand can now be done by machine.
Does this development have more advantages or disadvantages?
Your job was to write an introduction. Many of you posted them below - take a look as I've commented on some.
I have chosen this introduction as the best one:
A large number of household chores that were performed manually are now done with the help of machines. Overall, the merits eclipse the demerits of this development.
This has one clear sentence to introduce the topic, then a thesis statement that gives a clear opinion (there are more advantages than disadvantages.
Many of the introductions posted had the following problems:
- Too long
- Unclear thesis statement
- Too much detail
- No introductory sentence
- Too many grammar errors
You need to make your introduction simple and clear.
I advised you to look at this lesson to learn how to write an introduction:IELTS Essay Introductions
So you should take a look if you are still having problems.