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Cosmetic Surgery Essays

by hwabatte

Thank you for reading my cosmetic surgery essay. I hope to receive comments from all of you. If possible, please score my essay based on IELTS Writing Scale. Thank you again.

Should people be allowed to have cosmetic surgery before the age of 18?

With the application of science and technology in medicine, people, especially youngsters, are becoming more aware of cosmetic surgery. According to a recent survey, nearly half of teenagers from 11 to 18 years old said they wanted surgery in pursuit of a "designer" body like their idols and celebrities. However, having cosmetic surgery before turning eighteen is still illegal in most countries. There are pros and cons in doing this.

There are two main reasons why youngsters want to go through cosmetic surgery. Firstly, the surgery will theoretically make them more beautiful. Usually, a teen wishes to use the surgery to correct poorly proportioned parts of their body including a mis-shapen nose, protruding ears, overly large breasts, asymmetrical breasts, or severe acne and scarring. After their physical characteristics have been corrected, they should look prettier and more attractive. Secondly, having cosmetic surgery is a way to gain self-esteem. Because their physical problems have been solved, they no longer feel awkward about their appearances. Therefore, they frequently gain more confidence in themselves. For example, Caitlin Clemons, an American teenager, who used to have low self-esteem because of her body, was reported to gain confidence after her breast augmentation surgery.

On the other hand, having cosmetic surgery before 18 also has some drawbacks. Firstly, it increases the risk of being affected by side effects from these surgeries. Because teenagers' bodies have not yet matured to their final shape, going under the knife for plastic surgery could cause some dangers. For instance, when going under cosmetic surgery, there is a chance that you could have a reaction against anesthesia used in the operations, which can be deadly. Furthermore, cosmetic surgery is likely to make patients get scars, which cannot be corrected. Secondly, allowing teenagers to go through plastic surgery may make them overestimate physical appearances over inner characteristics. Gradually, they may not treasure their personalities but try as hard as possible to enhance their looks.

In conclusion, having cosmetic surgery before turning eighteen has both advantages and disadvantages. It could help you become more beautiful, but at the same time, make you become a surgery disaster, if the surgery does not succeed. As a teenager, trying to enhance our body is necessary, but we should also try to improve our personality.

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Jul 26, 2014
Cosmetic Surgery Essay
by: IELTS buddy


Your cosmetic surgery essay is very good, with good language control, organisation and vocabulary. It would score highly for these.

But did it take only 40 mins? As it is around 370 words. That is quite long.

Also, if the question asks you for an opinion, you must make it clear what your opinion is.

After discussing the pros and cons, do you think that under 18s should be allowed to have cosmetic surgery or not? You have not actually said what you think. This could affect your score for task response.


Apr 01, 2016
Cosmetic Surgery Essay - only my opinion
by: Anonymous

your ideas are quite good but i would like you to use more sophisticated words

Dec 11, 2018
Great essay
by: Anonymous

Your essay is very good the only mistake you have made is that you didn't say your opinion in the end but this essay would take a 16!!

Mar 20, 2020
IDK - Good Cosmetic Surgery Essays
by: Anonymous

ok so I am writing an argumentative essay for my college on cosmetic surgeries and I came here to get some ideas on how and what should I write and ALL these essays look so good. Y'all are pretty good.

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Use of Cosmetics Essay

by Lipsy

Today more people are opting for cosmetic surgeries, hair coloring and other cosmetics.

Why is this the case?

Do you think this development is positive or negative.

In this rampant age of modernization, people are applying different products as well as they are visiting cosmetic surgeons for enhancing their looks irrespective of their gender and age. I believe over-indulgence in such practices has bad impact on health.

The major reason for experimenting with appearances is that the individuals want to look different and attain everyone's attention. Whether a person is a college-going or well educated professional, everyone want to be an epitome of flawless beauty. These 'eye-catchers' are easily swayed by 'profit-hungry' companies which endorse their products through people's favourite celebrities. Moreover, these advertised spot-removal creams, hair styling gels claim instant results and viewers, to improve their looks and conceal their advancing age, purchase these products, for example, sales of fairness creams is particularly very high in India, and mainly females of age group between 20 and 50 buy these gels.

I believe that there is no harm in looking beautiful but if it is at the cost of health, it is not worthy. It can be often seen, these treatments paradoxically reduces the natural glow of skin and leave a permanent damage to hair and scalp. Several chemicals are added to these cosmetics which can ruin the health causing certain kinds of allergies and discomforts. Moreover, after having plastic surgeries one has to remain very conscious about his diet and even has to take certain medicines on regular bases which can cause many side-effects.

To cap it all, I would like to say, one should emphasize more on eternal beauty. Even, external beauty should be maintained by incorporating natural remedies in daily routines and use of such treatments should be restricted to obtain life-long positive outcomes.


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Dec 30, 2015
Good work
by: Anonymous

Great essay.

Feb 07, 2016
by: Anonymous

How much this essay can score?

Jul 15, 2016
my essay attempt on Use of Cosmetics
by: Anonymous

Today more people are opting for cosmetic surgeries, hair colouring and other cosmetics.
Why is this the case?

Do you think this development is positive or negative?

Over the Years, the fashion industry has grown immensely. Models go through a lot of makeovers in the form of hair colouring, cosmetic surgeries and cosmetic applications to keep them looking young and beautiful.They have huge fan following and influence certain group of people.
In my essay, i will mention the reasons for this trend ,its benefits and risks and then will put my opinion.

In this competitive world ,there is always a drive to excel which leads them to do something outstanding. to put themselves in frontline people try to make them look attractive and appealing.This makes them choose trendy hairstyles with different hair colour and using various cosmetic products. Sometimes these trends don't suit their body or face then they go for extreme things like cosmetic surgeries.From its origin of being used for burnt or traumatised victim,the cosmetic surgery has spread his legs into the fashion industry.

The positive aspect of this trend is that when we look beautiful and attractive, we automatically feel more confident, which reflects in our working style.This leads people to progress and prosper. Everybody admires a hard working person but if that person is stylish, beautiful and attractive, then he becomes a role model.

On the contrary , it also has some negative impacts on people’s health.Sometimes the cosmetic surgeries go so wrong that the final result is horrible. Too much hair colouring and excessive use of cosmetics also is a health hazard.Moreover, these all are quite expensive.

In my opinion, this advancement with mixed shades is to be handled very carefully. People should learn to accept the fact that real beauty comes from within. There is no harm in using some methods to make yourself look admirable and outstanding, but not at the cost of comfort and health.

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