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Jun 26, 2017
Essay on the Impacts of Shopping
by: Anonymous

Hi

You have some problems with sentence structure and tenses like have or will have. You need to practice this to achieve a better IELTS score. Good luck

Jun 27, 2017
Lack of vocabulary and sentence structure
by: Anonymous

Hi. U need to work on sentence structure and avoid repetition of words like 'thing', 'very', 'many', 'purchase'.

Instead of that u can use synonyms. Try to use some complex and heavy words to make ur essay much effective.

Jun 27, 2017
how to improve?
by: Vishav

Hi,

Thanks for your feedback!

How to improve sentence structure and tenses?

Jun 29, 2017
How to improve
by: Anonymous

hi Visav. I also have the same problem about sentence structure and vocabulary. Now I start reading more and more English journals, columns and editorials, then try to find out the unknown words from dictionary. It takes time.

Jul 01, 2017
vocabulary
by: manpreet

Hello,

You have given good thoughts in your essay but need to add some heavy words. Start writing the vocabulary related to the common topics. For instance fashion, sci and tech, food, education.

Then fit the pertinent vocab accordingly... spend your time in reading the newspaper, specially editorial section. Good luck

Jul 06, 2017
feedback on Essay on the Impacts of Shopping
by: Anonymous

Please read the questions carefully like:

"Why is shopping so popular?"

You didn't explain this point.

"What are effects on society?" is not explained only eg. is given.

So elaborate more.

Jul 07, 2017
connectors?
by: u may call me chandu

You need to add some connectors which can show your opinion or idea's.

such as-

firstly, secondly, thirdly, furthermore, moreover, nevertheless, although, first of all and so on.

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