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Health Education Essays

by Robee


Some people say that health care and education should be the responsibility of the government but others think that it is the responsibility of the individuals themselves.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.



Health care and education are two key factors to the development and progress of a country; ongoing arguments and discussions are becoming more intense pertaining to whether the responsibility should fall to the government or individuals alone. I do not believe that it is necessary for either party to take control of all the aspects but rather both sides must have their own part on the issue.

Political leaders should be sensitive and mindful of the expansion and improvement of quality in medicine and formal education. Public hospitals and schools should be set up and well maintained for less well off citizens that do not have the means to access services from private institutions. Making these services open to the public means more educated and healthy country men; it would drastically improve the economy and quality of living in the nation.

Individuals should emphasize the need of health and education as tools to help them live well and advance in the work force. It is a person's job to take care of themselves by eating well and doing regular exercises. There are selfless folks whom are qualified to teach; these volunteers willingly go to rural areas and educate the locals. There is only so much one person can do without the support and assisstance of other people, organizations and the government.

Both sides are capable of different and contributing abilities; it takes two to tango, the government and the people. In my understanding, leaders cannot lead with no followers and followers have nothing to depend on if they have no leader. Health care and education is the responsibility of both the government and individuals.

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Prevention or Cure

by Abduhakim
(Bukhara, Uzbekistan)

Prevention is better than cure. Out of the country’s health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventive measure.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?


Healthy generation. What shall we do to achieve this goal? from my point of view there should be several changes in the sphere of health care. Despite the fact the a vast quantity of money is spending in this there are still considerable drawbacks occurring. To solve the problem, as I mentioned above, we should change money delivery system.

To be suit for norms of modern era we should, at least, invest some fraction of money spending for healthy cure. Cause of it in this era, cure itself costs a great deal of money. If we spent even 1 portion out of billion for health education and measures of prevention we will succeeded. It shows both how huge is amount spent for cure and how prevention is effective.

Health care - thinking about current moment.
Health prevention - thinking about future

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Spending of the Health Budget

by dev
(Philippines)

Prevention is better than cure. Do you agree or disagree that out of the country's health budget a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health and education and preventive measures?

The government should allocate more funds for health education and preventive measures because it is said that prevention is better than cure. I strongly agree with this statement and will sight several reason to support my stand.

First, a healthy community can definitely help to cut-off the budget of the officials spending on health and therefore, this money can be used for other measures in order to improve the country's status. For instance, the government can develop infrastructures such as, widening of city roads and maintenance in public transport to minimize the problem with regards to traffic congestion.

Second, the community folks can perform their jobs well when they are not sick and it can benefit the country by having more people who are working in the country, as they can perform their roles and responsibilities at work, home and in the society. A person who is physically and mentally fit is more likely a disciplined individual and thus, the likelihood for violence will decrease, helping the government battle against crime.

Last, a healthier lifestyle like having a regular exercise and eating vegetables can help people live longer and can spend longer days with their loved one's enjoying the different creations made by the creator.

In my experience, working in a hospital and dealing with patients almost everyday, makes me realize how good health can be a beneficial tool in attaining happiness. I believe that through prevention, a person can achieve more in life and can function well in the society as a whole.

The conclusion of the matter is that, a person should start living a healthy life to contribute in the society in general and the country's leaders can focus greatly in the promotion of health, through education and preventive acts.

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Feb 01, 2015
Essay on health education and preventive measures
by: IELTS buddy

It is a very well written essay with very few errors, good grammar and good organisation. It would score highly for these criteria.

However, you have to be very careful about analysing the question to make sure you answer it fully.

You have focused on explaining why it is good to have a healthier society, but the question is asking you to examine the pros and cons of preventive measure as opposed to just treating people once they are sick (in other words with drugs etc).

You haven't really tackled this, so you will have a lowered score for not fully answering the question.

You can learn more about this in the writing lessons on this site:

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Good luck

Mar 24, 2016
Essay evaluation
by: john

The essay has a clear opinion and has supported it. I feel that the question does not ask the pros and cons at all. One can agree fully or disagree fully or agree and disagree and write both sides of the issue.

Mar 24, 2016
Essay evaluation
by: IELTS buddy

Hi John,

No the essay is not saying you have to write about pros AND cons (you could do both sides or one).

My point was not about that. It was the fact that it needs to be made clearer that the essays is referring to preventative measures any why this is better than treatment.

Actually upon reading it again, it is more fully addressed than I first thought, but it could still be made clearer. For example, the first body paragraph just reads as if to say healthy people are better. This is not clearly enough connected to prevention as people can be healthy whether it is through prevention or treatment, so could easily be applied to both.

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Education about Junk Food

by Jovana
(Valjevo,Serbia)


Hello to all..:) I'd like to post one of my essays on poor diet and health education and would appreciate anyone who is competent enough to give a comment and approximate band. I'm having my IELTS test for two months and need 6 band in each part of the test..thanks

Recent research shows that the consumption of junk food is a major factor in poor diet and this is detrimental to health. Some people believe that better health education is the answer to this problem, but others disagree.

What is your opinion?


Nowadays, people are undoubtedly confronted with the great negative effects that fast food have on their regular consumers. While many people are arguing whether some improvements in health education would be the best way to tackle this common issue, I strongly support the belief. However, I think there are also other moves which could be done to complement better results.

As some people do not agree with the health education positive influence they might be thinking that Government could solve this problem more efficiently using other measures. For example, authorities could make junk food advertising reduced or even forbidden in schools, streets and television. Thus, the consumption would probably be decreased as the fast food reminding adverts would vanish. Also, the Government could introduce paying higher taxes for junk food for both producers and advertisers. Eventually, that would lower the number of junk food products on market shelves.

On the other hand, improved education about health would have great influence on children and parents as well. Namely, introducing various lessons in school schedule would inevitably give high results. Those might include professional lectures along with convincing video tutorials, describing all negative impacts of junk food on human's health. As everyone tends to avoid being ill and preserve good health, will take proper measures to do so. Moreover, convenient, well-organized presentations about poor,unhealthy diet and its consequences, are considered to be indispensable for rising parent's awareness.That should encourage them to prepare healthier meals to their children.

To conclude, it seems avoidably to completely prevent our children and ourselves from often tasty fast foods, despite their severely bad effects. However, consequences yet could be reduced by engaging both parents and government to cooperate and find the best solutions.

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