Housing Essays

by Tam Nguyen


Many cities are currently facing a serious housing shortage.

What are some of the reasons for this shortage and what solutions can you suggest?



It is undoubtedly true that in many cities, the supply of houses is unable to meet the demand for shelters. Although this is caused by several reasons, there are still some feasible solutions for this issue.

There are two main reasons why housing crisis occurs. One reason is because of the scarcity of resources. While the population increases constantly, the amount of land does not increase. Therefore, we do not have sufficient land to fulfill people’s demand for accommodations. Another cause of housing shortage is that, as the quality of healthcare in today’s life has improved dramatically, life expectancy has also increased greatly compared to the past. This leads to a significant rise in the world’s population over time, which will place a burden on housing supply.

However, we still have some feasible measures to tackle this housing problem. Firstly, building more apartments instead of houses may help mitigate the problem of resource scarcity. Since an apartment can accommodate a tremendously higher number of people than a house can, governments should encourage vertical city development instead of horizontal one. Secondly, it is highly recommended that governments restrict the increase in population, which will help decrease the excessive demand for houses. This can be done by limiting the number of children born in families. In China, for example, because the population is huge, Chinese government enforces the rule that each Chinese family must not bear more than two children.

In conclusion, housing shortage is increasingly becoming a severe problem for many cities, and this arises because of various reasons. However, we can still cope with this problem if suitable policies are implemented.

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Rules for Building Houses

by Tony
(Vietnam)

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Some people think that new houses should be built in the same style as the older houses in the local area. Others disagree and say local authorities should allow people to build houses in the style of their own choice.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.


At the outset of cutting-edge sky scraper millennium, the way to construct the building is polarized whether it should be run with the conventional design or pursue the creative one. From my own perspective, millennials should have their own ideal freedom to design their house.

On the one hand, it is not underlying to dispute against the traditional design belonging to local areas. Due to the fact that these unique classic models are solely suitable for geographic traits in specific lands. Cottages, for instance, would be much more efficiently usable for mountainous regions, which are with unflatted surface, than these types of modernized human being. On top of that, these conventional architectures have been occupying both spiritual and cultural custom for some villages and countries, which is accreditted as special national identification, such as igloo in the South polar.

On the other hand, albeit value of outdated model, civilized man have been deploying any sector of our lives to adapt to the innovation of digital world, especially in architectural industry. The more creativity people utilize, the more harsh problems about local habitats are tackled. It seems logical tat ground breaking technology would support the house's owner to obtain thier dreaming house in any kind of geographic environment, even under the mysterious ocean. Additionally, only changing the constructional materials instead of holistic structure and appearance of their house, the national identificial characteristics and custom are still remained wel-known in all over the world.

As aforementioned explanations, citizens should spring theirselves and deploy thier mind to create their beloved settling place.

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Nov 14, 2018
Building Houses Essay
by: IELTS buddy

Sorry but I can't provide detailed feedback. The main thing I noticed
though is that it seems you are making it too complicated. It's
difficult to work out what the key ideas are in there that are
answering the question. In places I'm just not sure what you are saying.

I'd take a look at my site or others that explain how to structure an
essay and present your ideas clearly. You have some good vocabulary and grammar but it's not going to help you if your essay is not coherent.

Also be careful with grammar - you have a fragment: "Due to the fact that these unique classic models are solely suitable for geographic traits in specific lands". It's important you know how to write complex sentences correctly.

Nov 18, 2018
Rules for building houses
by: Anonymous

Sorry but I cant make out what you are trying to say in your essay.

Dec 02, 2018
Comment
by: Elshan

The second paragraph:

Tat = that
Tier = their

I like your use of words: groundbreaking technology and etc.

I don't like the paragraph sentence of the body baragraph #2.

In my view, you are probably trying to sound too fancy and overuse nice vocabulary. Thus, it is really hard to get your ideas.

I assume that your examiner won't give you a high score for this essay. Don't be discouraged though.

Dec 06, 2018
Reads like electronic translation from another language
by: Joko

I suppose you might ask someone who knows Vietnamese learners if they can make sense of it, but it reads like something written in an L1, put through google translate and then appended with cohesive devices.

The paragraphs seem to have topic sentences and, supporting sentences with explanations and examples. It's hard to tell. The paragraphs look like they each are focused one side of the discussion. I think.

The conclusion, albeit short, at least serves its role without bringing up new points!

He has discussed both sides and expressed his own opinions in that millennials should have their ideal freedom.

Why only millennials? That could have better supported.

Jan 16, 2019
A no no
by: Anonymous

There is absolutely no way this essay can score above 5. The writer in an attempt to buttress his point, played to the gallery extensively.

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Living in a House or Apartment

by Sze100

Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel there are more advantages to living in an apartment.

Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?


Many people hold the opinion that living in a house is the best. Others, however, disagree and claim that living in an apartment is even better. Hereunder I will look more thoroughly into this matter.

It is undoubtedly true that living in a flat is quite convenient due to many opportunities which it is able to provide. Everything seems to be close, especially if your block of flats is in a good location, and doing your shopping, driving your children to school or having some entertainments like nightlife, for instance, is within the reach of your hand. Moreover, you do not have to worry about repairing your roof or having your apartment insulated, as it is frequently provided by a housing association of some sort. Generally, from my personal point of view, living in a flat is perfect for people who love living in a city and enjoy everything which is connected with that.

On the other hand, having your own house has also some great advantages. Despite the fact that, in my country, living in a detached house or a mansion is often connected with a social status, it brings a lot of different possibilities which are impossible while you live somewhere else. To illustrate this, just imagine yourself sitting in your own garden, with a book and a cup of tea, listening to birds. In my opinion such a scene brings all other disadvantages of living in a house, practically, to zero.

To conclude, I would say that living in a house is for completely different group of people than living in an apartment. I have to admit that I belong to the first one thus I recommend living in a detached house to everybody.

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Nov 25, 2015
Band
by: Author

Hi all,

What band would I get, in your opinion, for this essay on a real exam?

Dec 04, 2015
5.5bands for this essay
by: Sahota

You try best but this type of essay got only 5 or 5.5 band so keep trying more all the best and ember practice makes man perfect

Dec 04, 2015
6band
by: Harveer

You try best but I Agree with Sahota

Dec 03, 2016
band
by: Anonymous

6 band. It is an acceptable essay.

Jun 22, 2017
tera jija
by: tera jija

5 bands I give u.

Beause you write "you" in essay so that's why I give u 5 bands.

It's bad effects on examiner.

Oct 06, 2017
Band 8
by: Jai

Hi,

This essay should have band 8. You have paraphrased your idea. Spoken on both aspects of the given task. You have written a good paragraph, limiting one idea per paragraph. Ideas are arranged cohesively. You have used good range of complex sentence structure.

Jun 04, 2018
Having guts to ask your feedback
by: Anonymous

Please, request to the commentors who gave you 5 or 5.5 band, to come forward, at least write an essay and ask feedback on it.

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