IELTS Essay - Improving Living Standards

by Marosa

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Many countries aim to improve their living standard by economic development, but some important social values are lost as a result.

Do you think the advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages?

It is argued that in course of economic growth some essential social values get damaged, despite an increase in quality of life. Since the beginning of human history people have adopted a goal to have a wealthier and happier life. However, these two do not always come together and sometimes they even contradict each other. In the next two paragraphs of this essay I shall discuss pros and cons of economic development from perspective of social values.

Benefits of economic progress are undeniable for many reasons. Firstly, common welfare is one of the indicators of humans' satisfaction. From my own observations, I can tell that people are happier and more proactive during times of economic prosperity, compared to the period of the financial crisis, such as the Global Crisis of 2008. Secondly, there is a direct link between poverty rates and frequency of law breaches. For example, as per official statistics of New York Police, Bronx has been recognized to be both one of the poorest and the most criminal counties of the city.

From the other hand, while chasing material benefits people often forget about social and humanistic values. In other words, the more emphasize people make on earning money, the less attention they pay to social aspects of life. It is a usual practice for those living in urban areas to gradually replace human interaction with more and more hours spent at work. As a result, they become antisocial and serve a poor example to the younger generation, forming an ever-evolving cycle. Various studies have shown that people, who live in metropolitan areas are more depressed, than those living in smaller towns.

To conclude, every issue has more than one sides and this matter is not an exception either. However, after consideration of both advantages and disadvantages of the influence that economic development has on the social part of our lives, I can state that in my opinion the benefits overweigh drawbacks.

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Oct 09, 2018
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Feb 18, 2019
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by: Anonymous

It is pretty simple and concise. But, check your linking devices such as "From the other hand". It would have been better like " On the other hand".
The grammar was okay expect few articles mistakes.
But in all it is a good essay.

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Improving Quality of Life Essay

by Hella Rohan
(Abu Dhabi )

Could someone please help me find out the band of this writing essay?

People living in the twenty-first century generally have a better quality of life than people who lived in previous centuries.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

As we have already stepped into the 21st century, it is inevitably true that enormous changes like advances in technology, heath care, and transportation will bring enormous improvement in the quality of life of people compared to the older centuries. This essay will highlight some of the quality of life improvements in the medical and transportation field in the modern era.

Development in the medical field has made the biggest impact on the lives of people in the modern era. To start with, diagnosis of severe diseases is straightforward as a consequence of advanced technological apparatuses and innovative devices. Secondly, finding a cure to a deadly flu or virus is less complicated in the twenty-first century, this is due to the constant research done by the scientists and having a flexible means of communication between the researchers of different countries. Lastly, the percentage of the people dying to medical illness has significantly reduced over the decades, due to the advances made in the medical field, hence improving the quality of life for people.

Another visible quality of life improvement has been done in the transportation field through technological advancements. In the modern era, millions of people are travelling daily from one continent to the other in matter of hours. Travelling is faster, more reliable and cheaper today compared to a decade ago. Additionally, the advancements in transportation has enabled people of all over the world to experience diversity and different cultures improving and enhancing their quality of life.

In conclusion, humans in the modern era experience a richer quality of life then the people who walked the earth in previous centuries. Through the vigorous experiments and knowledge left behind by our ancestors, there have been constant development in every field to make life easier and more pleasant for everyone.

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Mar 30, 2018
dr ola
by: Anonymous

ur ideas were well expressed and paragraphs were fairly structured,but u wrote in details about an aspect while completely neglecting the other

Sep 13, 2019
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by: Anonymous

Have a second look at your grammar, specially use of prepositions and conjunction. Plus make use of some complex vocabulary

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