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Living a Healthy Life Essays

by Kajal R Desai
(Ahmedabad)

Do we live healthy enough lives?

Do we live healthy enough lives?

In many countries people are having health problems because they choose to live a unhealthy life.

What are the reasons for this?

What can be done to solve this problem?


It is important to consider that why in today's fast paced life, people prefer to live a ruinous lifestyle. In this essay I will explore some causes associated with this and propose some solutions to tackle this issue.

First of all, the main reason which contribute to this problem is inflation rate. Therefore, people need to work over time to fulfill their basic needs which left them with less time for exercises and recreational sports. As a consequence, they fail to balance between personal and professional life. To illustrate, many time companies give double pay to employees for working in over time. So, if they work over time for more money, very less time left for their daily routine. Hence, they skip physical exercises. However, to tackle this problem, governments should pass the ordinance of fix working hours and national wage regulation. So that, people prefer to leave work place on time, and because of this, they find some leisure time for themselves.

Furthermore, in today's world, private club membership is becoming more and more expensive and there are less public space to recreate. As a result of this, people choose to avoid exercises. The reason for this is that, to cope with excessive population growth, governments mostly focus to build vertical concrete buildings rather that sports complex, parks and gardens. Hence, people get demotivated to do exercises. In contrast, if governments focus more on building recreational sports facilities or public gym, people find them cheaper options and they begin to do exercises. Therefore, to handle this situation, authorities should build more public spaces for free time activities. So that, people can stay healthy.

In conclusion, while people are having more problems in many countries around the globe because of unhealthy lifestyle, this problem is not insurmountable. In my view, this the government's responsibility to tackle this issue and they should begin by considering some of the proposed solutions above.

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Looking After Health

by Tam
(Vietnam)

Hello,

It's been a long time. I noticed I wasn't good enough and I spent several weeks to enhance my writing. Please judge my latest one. Thank you sincerely.


People should look after their health for personal benefits, rather than a duty for a society.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?


There is an ever-increasing opinion that keeping fit should be considered as a good deep for oneself, instead of a duty to society. From my perspective, although the cost of health services may be unsatisfied with some patients, the advantages of this opinion outweigh its disadvantages for the following reasons.

We can point out the indisputable fact that the health of every resident is facing a range of dangers increasingly. As consequences of the industrialization, we could see a plenty of examples such as diseases coming from pesticides in agriculture, gas emission in transportation or chemical components in junk foods. Besides, wars, crashes and sudden accidents also lead people to injuries, as the more the development we reach, the heavier the consequenses we must stand in some circumstances.

Another equally important reason could be prevailing usages of medical insurance. Take the change of thoughts in well-being over these years as an evident. In the past, the prescription charges used to be worries of most households. Residents sometimes rejected to receive check-ups, while medical centers were known as the isolated places for wealthy social class only. However, nowadays, the prospecrity of economy eliminates those anxieties by medical insurances. Citizens may easily go private to heal their aches and pains or even diabetes, cardiac problems. Being as fit as a fiddle, thus, could be a possible goal.

The long and the short of it, I am strongly in favour of the belief that keeping healthy is an action for every single individuals, due to the dangers of illnesses and the benefits
of health insurances.

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Mar 07, 2018
Looking After Health Essay
by: Anonymous

Intro:

1. a duty FOR
2. the cost of ... may be UNSATISFYING TO

Para 1:

1. "point out", in my opinion, is informal. You should use its synonyms: designate, appoint, etc.

2. "is facing a range of dangers increasingly" --> is facing an increasing range of dangers"

3. "wars, crashes and sudden accidents". War is quite too big for the idea you were writing here. Just say " traffic accidents" is enough.

Para 2:

1. could be THE prevailing usages
2. evidence.
3. reject + gerund.
4. prosperity

Band

Task Achievements: 7
Coherence: 6
Vocabulary: 6-7
Grammar: 5-6

You have a huge difference between your vocabulary and grammar. Try to improve your grammar or you won't get your target band score.

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Alternative Medicine

by Hayder Ahmed
(Leeds, UK)

Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine. However, at best these methods are ineffective, and at worst they may be dangerous.

To what extent do you agree with this statement?


Traditionally, people in the past used alternative medicine for a long time. Nowadays, many people are still using this medicine to treat a lot of diseases. It is agreed that alternative medicine is not useful and sometime dangerous. Analysing both invalidity of alternative medicine to treat many illnesses as well as the dangerous of drugs in this medicine will show this.

Firstly, alternative medicine does not use techniques and facilities that are important to treat a lot of illnesses as modern medicine do. For example, many diseases require surgery operations to succeed by using many technical devices such as sonar and X-Ray that help doctors to perform these operations in a best way. Therefore, alternative medicine is not the best to process many illnesses. Thus this makes it clear why alternative medicine is not effective and useless.

Secondly, drugs in alternative medicine do not tested scientifically to specify if it is dangerous or not. For instance, alternative medicine uses plants to produce drugs and these plants may be contain toxic materials or any other dangerous substances. So, when human uses these drugs that are harmful, the state of person may be worse and sometime lead to death. From this it becomes quite evident that alternative medicine may be dangerous and harmful.

In summary, alternative medicine has many drawbacks such as useless and sometime very dangerous. Thus, it is clear why the idea of using alternative medicine is helpful to treat many diseases cannot be supported. After analysing this subject, it is predicted that negative aspects of using alternative medicine much more than positive ones and the government should have full control of using alternative medicine.

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Please comment on my Changes in Society Essay about Alternative Medicine. Thanks.

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Mar 25, 2015
Very good essay
by: Samir

Very good essay, I should give you 5, but I am trying to keep you practicing because you never know what may occur in IELTS.

However, you have two grammatical mistakes:

>>drugs in alternative medicine do not tested

Drugs ... are not tested

>> plants may be contain toxic materials

Plants may contain....


Mar 26, 2015
Samir - Alternative Medicine Essay
by: Anonymous

Thank you Samir for your comments.

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IELTS Essay - People's Future Health

by Sofia
(Italy)

Will people's health be worse in the future?

Will people's health be worse in the future?

Hii could you give me opinions on this essay? thanks!

The average standard of people’s health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?


It has been asserted nowadays that in the future people's health could witness a decrease compared to its present parameters. Personally, I strongly disagree with this view. Nonetheless, this essay will discuss both sides, using both academical examples.

On the one hand, the ever-growing use of experimental cures and treatments, which have lately been conducted in most hospitalization centres, could lead us to believe that there are no reasons to think that people's health is likely to deteriorate soon. Governments and benefactors all over the world are known to fund improvements for research centres, in order to find a cure for rare diseases, such as lyme and lupus, and in the fight against the coronavirus in these two previous years, scientists and doctors' experiments have led to successful results, thanks to the large amount of time and money invested on it. This can be used as an example to explain how our heath is efficiently handled by people, who are constantly studying to ameliorate our fairly fragile immune system.

On the other hand, pollution and climate changes play pivotal roles in the increasing cases of all kinds of cancers and tumours, resulting in a pejoration of our general health. The index of greenhouse gases emissions is dangerously high in the latest years and the contamination of air and food is the greatest aggravating factor for these mortal diseases. For instance, outputs carried out by Oxford University in 2020, shows us how, in the next 10 years, we will conclusively be affected by more pandemics and rare diseases, due to air pollution and the poorly conditions of our planet.

Having manifested the aforementioned points of view and examples, it can be recapitulated that in my opinion, albeit the increasing environmental pollution and the issues resulted from it, doctors and scientist are outrightly engaged in improving our conditions and we will undergo promising experimental treatments to better recover from maladies.

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IELTS Essay Alcohol Selling Age Restrictions

by Elvira
(Azerbaijan)

Hi friends! can you estimate my writing essay plz

Alcohol is sold in many countries only to people who are above 21.

Is it a positive or negative development?


In some countries alcohol is sold only to people whose ages starts from 21. I am entirely convinced that this issue positively influences community nowadays and must be controlled in the whole world.

First and foremost, it saves lives of people by preventing alcohol-related traffic fatalities. Brain of adolescent is affected differently by alcohol than the adult brain. Although, in a state of alcohol impairment, the adolescent brain is impaired similar to adult brain but to differing degrees. Brain of people who did not reached 21 is worse in remembering things while they are drunk. In contrast, early drink-starters are more likely predicted to experience alcohol drinking and related problems later in their life.

Additionally, many researches confirm that in the countries, where alcohol sale is restricted to people who did not reached 21, the overall number of alcohol-related fatalities has decreased. Furthermore, early alcohol consumption can lead to disastrous calamities like suicides or murders, affecting brain of adolescents unconsciously.

Beside this, young people who start using alcohol before age 21 are more likely to be involved in violent behaviors. Consumption of alcohol at the early ages are also detrimentally linked to human health and can lead to kidneys disease.

In conclusion, from my point of view, age restriction on alcohol sale in some countries has beneficial impact to community rather than negative, and I strongly believe that this age limitation will be in all countries in the next decade.

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Mar 12, 2017
Grammar
by: Anonymous

Didn't reach ed ???? It is bad mistake.

Mar 12, 2017
Repetitions
by: Anonymous

twice it was mentioned "did not reached"

Mar 12, 2017
Mostly Grammatical mistakes
by: Shakil

Mistake 1: ages start from (Fragment error + grammatical mistake)

Mistake 2: Brain of Adolescent
Correction: An adolescent's brain
(Something of something (Legs of the table) is possible as long as it's a thing and not a person. For a living thing it should be 'A person's brain')

Mistake 3: Did not reached. It's a severe mistake. After 'Did not' there will always be present form of the verb, like 'Did not reach'.

Mistake 4: brain of adolescents.
Correction: Affecting an adolescent's brain.

Mistake 5: Are also detrimentally linked
Correction: Is also detrimentally linked

Mistake 6: 'In conclusion ....' (Fragment error)

Suggestion: Concentrate on Tense, Preposition, article, parallelism, sentence structures. Hope you improve soon.


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IELTS Essay: Free Healthcare for Smokers

by Ridma - ridma.layangani@gmail.com
(Sri Lanka)

IELTS Essay - Smoking

IELTS Essay - Smoking

In some countries in the world, health services are free. However, some people feel that smokers should not get free treatment for smoking related illnesses, because they are knowingly harming themselves.

Do you agree or disagree with the above statement?


The majority of countries across the world provide health services free of charge. Some health experts contend that people who become ill due to tobacco smoking should bear up their health expenses. However, I firmly believe that they have right to gain health services without paying money due to various circumstances.

Health is a basic human need and every person have right to obtain health services equally. It will not be a fair decision to discriminate people based on their health habits or underlying causes to diseases in providing health care facilities because nobody get diseases willingly. In addition, these people may be bread winner of their families. Hence, neglecting those people by the health care sector would put their lives to danger, thereby creating various problems to dependents.

Furthermore, smoking is an addiction which is difficult to quite. There are numerous ways to attract people to smoking in the society. Moreover, cigarettes are available in the market where everyone can reach it easily. Adictors need to assistance of health professionals in order to quitting smoking. Additionally, people have been dead considerably due to other reasons such as motor vehicle accidents and become disabled because of careless driving. However, treatments are given freely for them.

On the other hand, fumes released to atmosphere by tobacco consuming put passive smokers to danger. It is true that people are educated frequently about negative side effects of smoking. As a result, the individuals should be responsible for their health.

In conclusion, it is acceptable that smokers put not only their lives but others live danger also. These cigar-smokers are extra burden to the health care system of any country due to various reason. Although, health as a fundamental need of human, smokers should have equal opportunity to reach to health care facilities similarly to others.

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