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by matias tonti

Hi Guys it is my first time to share my writing. Need to score a 7 so any help or comment to improve my writing will be really appreciated. Cheers


Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think is fully justified while others think it is unfair.

Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, it is acknowledged that sport professionals earn huge salaries that exceed other respected professionals by far. This situation has sparked a heated debate with opinions on both sides, in favor and against.

Some people argue that is irresponsible to pay such amount of money to people who has just borned with a natural gift to play certain sport. They believe this is unfair for other professionals that spent several years studying hard and have to deal with really serious situations daily. Doctors, engineers, fire fighters among others, are clear examples of this unbalanced situation. Furthermore, we are setting a bad example for the youngsters as they grow up witnessing how our society do not reward the hard work.

Nevertheless, other people assert that athletes deserve their salary. They have a very short career, as can only play at highest performance during very limited amount of years. Normally sport players above thirty five are consider old to keep playing professionally. Moreover, they have a big responsibility as are requested to perform their best in every single game. It is their job to strive until see their team win, there are millions of dollars involved in each game. Companies invest a lot of money to sponsor teams and this creates an extra pressure on the players.

In a nutshell, I believe that athletes deserve a huge compensation for their work. Even though it is true that they have been naturally gifted however they still need to train hard every day to perform their best and help the sponsors to boost their brand value hence increasing the selling.

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Jul 02, 2014
teacher's remarks
by: misbah waqar

You have really done a very good job on this Sports Essay. It is a well organized essay. You have used complex sentences which can easilly enable you to get 7.

Mar 08, 2017
Sports Essays - great job
by: Anonymous

i love this article. its so helpful i was able to create a report on this. thanks so much.

Nov 02, 2018
IELTS instructor - Sports Essays
by: Valiyzada

Well done. There is coherence and cohesion. but in my senntiment you have to clarify widely your second point in 1 paragraph. You can add some supportive sentences.

Also, the word compensation is not suitable here. Compensation is money that someone who has experienced loss or suffering claims from the person or organization responsible, or from the state.

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Earnings of Sports Professionals

by Anu verma
(Ludhiana India)

Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think is fully justified while others think it is unfair.

Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

It is irrefutable fact that games are the symbol of prosperity and wealth of a nation. Nowadays athletes are paid with higher wages as compared to other weighty professions. It is due to certain reasons.Prior to opine, it is necessary to discuss the importance of sports as well as other career options.

To embark with, there are various professions which highly attract human beings such as doctor, engineer, astronaut etc. These all professions need hard work with concerted efforts.These profession are related to the well being of society and lead to many new discoveries for mankind. Albeit, these are highly respectable professions yet government does not pay them according to their working hours. By doing this state authorities are giving false impressions and somehow encouraging biasness. In future these issue can sparkle numerous debates and adversely affect to economy of a country.

On the flip side, people who think that sports-persons should paid highly, they must support the fact that sports persons career is of short duration. They start almost after 20s and continued to play efficiently up-to only 35years. Secondly, they need more salary to maintain their physique and to enhance their sport skills. To illustrate, athletic persons need balanced diet, gymnastic facilities, sports equipments to practice regularly. Next, they win various championship to make their nation proud and make their country respectable among other nations.finally,they also work harder than other professions when do practice in ground despite of sunlight or winter season difficulties.

In compendium and In my opinion it is undoubtedly fair to give huge pay to sport persons in order to meet their basic needs or to maintain their lifestyle.

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Dec 06, 2014
My comment
by: Sara

Hi Anu,

I have read your essay, I think it is really good. it is easy to read and you met all the task achievement.

I think it is better to make your word more easy. For me, I find the second body paragraph is much more easy to read and follow. For the first body paragraph, you used really difficult words, so I do not know if it use them correctly or not.

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Oct 23, 2016
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by: Anonymous

hi anu,
I think youve done your best to complete this long essay. its comprehensive.

Feb 08, 2017
by: Billy bob Joe

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Banning Dangerous Sports

by Denis

Some people think that dangerous sports should be banned, while others disagree.

Do you agree or disagree?

From the evidence of the history, dangerous sports have been more preferred by people than other competitions. Despite this fact, some people hold the opinion that these deadly sports should be banned as they may hurt athlete’s health and even ruin their lives. I disagree with this view and believe that such sports can easing international tensions and bring people together.

Firs of all, the history has shown that extreme competitions could even interrupt battles and nations together to stadiums. From the ancient world, when Greeks and Romans would leave battlefields to participate in the gladiators games. To the modern politics disputes, when athletes from Israel and Palestine would forget their differences and compete fair and peacefully in martial games. Moreover, these sports usually attract the world’s attention that could force leaders to stop their disputes and review options to make partnerships with the opponents.

Secondly, dangerous sports can bring people with different background together. For example, my country is a multicultural one, but, people are still divided into ethnical groups. However, MMI fights is a national sport and people with different culture and believes would support together our sportsmen and sportswomen during the season. It is clear that these competitions greatly benefit our community teaching the citizens tolerance.

Nevertheless, it is impossible to ignore arguments against dangerous sports. It is obvious that there is a huge risk for athletes, but the event organizers could improve rules and safety equipment to reduce this risk and to make such sports less dangerous.

In conclusion, banning dangerous sports can bring more disadvantages than benefits. In my opinion, we should focus on improving facilities, standards and rules for these sports to minimize the risk.

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Sep 26, 2016
by: Anonymous

nice one but not high level of vocabulary

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Banning Dangerous Sports

by channa

Should dangerous sports be banned?

Should dangerous sports be banned?

Some people think that dangerous sports should be banned while other disagree.

Do you agree or disagree?

Banning dangerous sports, such as motocross, bull run, hose riding is a controversial tropics from last few decades, but those dangerous sports failures are really horrible and critical, so that I will argue , life threatening sports have to be banded

Firstly I will explain, what are the major benefits of the basic sports such as cricket , table tennis or foot ball , That sport helps to enhance and maintain healthy lifestyle , even sports helps to ease the stress and bring happiness. But dangerous sports always increase the stress of contester because of the risky environment and it mostly enhances the fear instead of the happiness

Even not only that, due to the massive failure of the life threatening sports, contesters can permanently disable or it could be a chance to die, As a example, competitors who play boxing as a sport have more chance to affect in cancers in their face in the future, due to the massive impacts, which cause to distort the cell in their face, even motor sports contester have chance to be disable due to an accidents when they compete

Human life is unique resource to the world, so it should not be lost or disable by themself by doing dangerous sports, even dangerous sports not only put contesters life in risk, it makes contester’s family miserable and sometime it cause to damage the non relevant lives also, so having those points in to account, I strongly agree to ban the dangerous sports to save valuable human lives

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Jul 18, 2015
addition fact
by: rajat bajaj

we know that children are very much curious in nature and what they see, they try to do. so seeing these dangerous sport. They will try to do these thing at there own which is very dangerous for their lives.

Aug 15, 2015
My Opinion!!
by: Niks

Extreme sports has become leisure activity in many countries in the developed or developing world, but it has hidden risks too. As surveyed in 2000 and 2011, more than 4 millions injuries are attributed due to extreme sports. This essay will discuss about extreme sports are dangerous for one's life and should be banned.

Firstly, Extreme sports, all physical activities can help to improve health. People gain confidence and get feeling of well being after doing extreme sports. Lots of people enjoy to do these kinds of sports. "One man was die during bungee jumping" these kinds of news are common nowadays in newspapers. These kind of arguments raises the question that extreme sport should banned or not?

However, Extreme sports will proved fatal, if it is not done under experts guidance. One mistake or a person can maimed for whole life. Extreme sports required lot of time for practice as well as discipline. For instance, some kids start trying some kind of stunts to feel cool, and they get injured because they never gone through any training. These sports are expensive too, and people spend lots of money for few min of enjoyment. Some people do these sports just do upload their pictures on social media like face, twitter, or whatsapp and many more.

Taking above mentioned points, I am inclined to believe that extreme sports are full of danger. The drawbacks of overshadow the sportive of extreme sports. Extreme sports should be banned.

Jan 05, 2016
I agree
by: Cheyanne

I agree they should ban extreme sports right away and it will make them risk their lives and it could cause death or distorts in their face and distorts in their face and future to the cell.

Mar 01, 2016


Mar 15, 2016
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Apr 05, 2016
Worth The Risk
by: Anonymous

I feel that we should keep dangerous sports, even though they are very risky. I mean what is life living for if you don't take a risk once in a while. This is a free country and just because you think they are dangerous, you can't stop them from taking the risk. You don't have to do a dangerous sport. But don't ban it just because of your own opinions. I am a gymnast myself and I understand the risks but if you train well and be confident with yourself you can do anything. And if you are motorcycling just wear a helmet and take precautions and you'll be fine and will have the time if your life.

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Youth and Sports Competitions

by magi

Some people believe that sport competitions are a source of emotional stress for young people. Therefore, youth should be banned from participating in sport competitions.

Do you agree or disagree?

Whether it is a sport match or an academic test, competition has always been a preponderance part of life and it contribute to immense pressure for all ages; consequently, there is no escape from rivalry. From my point of view, l strongly disagree with this argument that prohibiting adolescents from participating in sport competition for the sake of alleviating emotional stress.

To start out, restriction in certain activity cannot prevent from emotional distress or intellectual involvement, or promoting another skills. Broadly speaking, studies have shown students who do not associate in competition are vulnerable than some of whom are active in sport events. To be more specific, pressurized sport condition not only make them stronger against tough situation in future but also it shape their characters so sociable. As a case in point, if they be a member of Football, volleyball or basketball team at school or be a individual sport they would learn team working, respect for the rival and understanding concept of defeat and triumph; furthermore, they would enjoy better mental and emotional health.

In conjunction with the influence of participating in competition the undeniable role of physical fitness improvement should not be underestimated when this issue is dealt with. Generally put, apart from health benefits that sport activities brings for them, physical health and fitness is one of the most substantial factors for mental and intellectual health. To illuminate, regular as well as professional exercise in order to improve physical fitness and motivation is indispensable for participating in competition. it is a immense discrepancies between youngsters that cause make them so successful in education and life.

To conclude, as far as I am personally concerned, there is no justification for banning adolescents form participating in sport competition. Notwithstanding the high level of stress in this events, the advantages is so remarkable than disadvantages.


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Oct 11, 2016
opposite view
by: Anonymous

In this essay opposite view is absent.

Nov 06, 2016
by: Akshar

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Nov 06, 2016
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Nov 11, 2016
plurals and singulars
by: Chichi

hi. your essay contains strong vocabulary and flows really well. however you need to take note of plurals ie the 'advantages' are instead if is. singulars are followed by is plurals are..

otherwise the rest is fine.

P.s even though you strongly disagree with the idea, you were supposed to give a passage that agrees with the topic.

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Sports Professionals Earnings

by Sameer
(Mumbai India)

Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.

Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

In these days of the millennium, players of sports are treated as celebrities in terms of their pay package. This has sparked a heated argument on whether it is justifiable or biased. However, in my opinion, athletes should be paid lucratively as their health is on a threat but other professions too should also be given priorities.

The prime factor behind paying huge salaries to sports person is putting their lives at risks. To be more precise, this profession demands rigorous training and an ability to perform a consistently well at speed, under fatigue and pressure conditions in a competition environment. This can cause physical or mental injury which can be detrimental to their lives. For instance, in a recent survey, it was discussed that frequent head blows can cause injury to the brain that can lead to depression, memory loss or dementia. Therefore, an attractive package is fair compensation to their countless energy and the huge health risk.

On the other hand, paying enormous salaries to sports person can create disparity among other professions which can lead to a shortage of these expertises. To elaborate more, professions such as doctors, teachers leave no stone unturned in making the world a better planet to reside. They too undergo a gruelling training and internship to hone their skills. Doctors work day in day out in keeping their patients' health. Similarly, teachers work tirelessly in moulding their students’ behaviour to make them civilized citizens. Hence, to avoid paucity of skills, these professions should not be overlooked in terms of payment.

In conclusion, athletes sacrifice a lot in terms of their health so they are paid excessively which are just; however, other occupations should also be valued and compensated appropriately.

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Success in Sport Essay

by Vannie

Some people think that physical strength is important for success in sport, while other think that mental strength is more important.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Physical energy is considered to be an imperative aspect for achievements in the field of sports. However, many individuals argue that mental strength also plays a pivotal role. This essay represents view for both sides along with the opinion.

Firstly, talking about physical energy, regular exercises enables an individual to stay fit and healthy by stretching body muscles that keeps the body active. Secondly, exercises can be performed in a way of practising any activity related to sports; for an instance, playing tennis or football may provides an encouragement and an exploration of new ideas and techniques that can be applied during games. Lastly, exercises reduces the risk of health issues, such as alterations in blood pressure, cardio-vascular diseases, by regulating blood flow in whole body that prevents risk of heart and brain strokes.

On the other side, a healthy mind lives in a healthy body. According to this phrase, mental strength performs a crucial role in sports activities. In today's world of competition, a person came through many situations that are full of stress, for example, team pressure, pressure of winning or loosing the game. Moreover, an individual cannot focus on sports unless or until his mental strength is not strong. A stress may leads a player into depression which can put him on stress releasing medication for his entire life. Furthermore, state of happiness provides relaxation to mental power that boost up the confidence level to perform well in the sports.

In my opinion, both physical as well as mental strength are considered to be mandatory because if exercises helps in the growth of body similarly mental strength gives confidence and support to play well.

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Improving Public Health Essay

by Efe16

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is argued by some people that the most efficient method for improving and developing public health is by building more sports facilities; whereas, some people claim that this would not have any significant effect on public health; therefore, other solutions should be thought. In my opinion, doing exercise contributes human beings’ health more than we can imagine, but there are certainly better ways to improve public health rather than the increase in number of facilities.

To begin, some people view to open new sports centers as the best way of developing public health as doing physical exercises increases the stamina of human beings by improving their cardiovascular capacities. Furthermore, it contributes to the human well-being not only on physically but also on mentally. More time is spent on sport facilities, less time to think about other issues, relieving human’s mind; thus, we can see more peaceful people everywhere.

On the other hand, it is thought by some that there are also other measures for improving public health better than the new sports centers. One of these is educating people about health care because if they would know what to do when they feel sick, they can get well much quicker. Other method is cleaning of the public areas such as trains or libraries should be done more frequently because possible viruses around these areas could affect humans’ health in serious way. Last possible way is that foods and drinks on the markets should be regulated more strictly because there has been a hot debate in recent years about possible harms of GMOs on human health; therefore, regulations of government on food and beverages would be a wise choice.

Even though an increase in the number of sports facilities can develop public health importantly, I do not think that it is the best idea for public’s health, so other views can have more direct effects on public health.

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Sports Professionals Salaries

by Sid

Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is completely fair while others think that it is not justified.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is true that some successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than other important profession's people. In this passage, I am going to give the views from both sides of the coin in this passage.

People who are earning handsome amounts of money in the sports profession have worked hard to come to the spot where they are right now. If we talk about a cricketer then out of twenty-thirty thousand people who are aiming to go pro, only ten to fifteen people get selected. In this long and hard journey, some of the hustlers have lost their jobs, their education, and what not to fulfill their dream so Its only fair that those who worked their way to the spot should deserve something great as this much competition is not even in the education field, and you surely don't have to train yourself too much to get a good job in the educational field.

Where on the other end if we look into it differently then, there are so many working employees whether they are private or government they don't really have a good salary in their respective jobs. Sometimes it is so bad that they are not even able to afford proper health care and education for their children. It's not only happening in third-world countries it's also happening in other developed nations. People who have spent all their time studying to get a good job are now stuck with something which is not even helping them get proper living necessities. If we compare the salaries of Indian army soldiers to those of cricketers then you would be shocked to see that the salary of an Indian army soldier is around 6,000 USD per year whereas an Indian team cricket player would easily earn around 600,000 USD and its not fair. In 6,000 USD per annum you won't even be able to afford a good college in India leaving the other things aside.

I think that the situation is not fair, as the soldiers have to work as hard as the cricketer or even more to get a place in the army, As a matter of fact, its true that they are willingly serving the nation but they at least should be provided with enough salary so that they could help their children get into a good "private college".

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